Past The Deep
Devised in a long forgotten slumber
I wish to awake
Weaknesses in the words are alien to me
Numb to these feeling over taking me
Will linger on the North
Will linger on the winter sky;
My love
Just lingers on
Reaching for tears
They fall through my grasp
Helpless marionettes at long gone
Shattering as they crash
On the ground
In a puddle they lie
Decorating the floor
With their pain
Fates entwined
Regard
The full moon
Though I rise and out my blindness
I reach to see
The true sight of what became of me
Laughter drown, swallowed by the key to the frame
Laughter drown, swallowed by the warm glow from me
Laughter drowns, swallowed by the strength of the valleys.
Swallowing me
Free my strength
Unbind me
Memories march past the deep
Hurt in me
I cannot erase
The good side of me
I've tried the mathematics
Still things
Don’t add up
How to hear those things in a promise
Words I never heard
Words written on
Pages of silk
With a million tears
Of angels
A gentle poem of how to love me
To ease my last piece
Peace never known to me
A chance to catch a previous time
When I was never I
See a paper
Devoid of my words
Words that weep wearily, for me, and you
They were left scattered amidst the words to hide
from you and I
My teachers
I have failed you
A million stars
I let burn out
As the last star falls
I also failed you
Steven Mels
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Written May 13th, 2006
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EXCELLENT WORK!!!!!
My dear sweet son, Steven:
I have missed you so very much much..... I do not feeling this sadness of yours, I do not know what to say or do for you in order to aleviate such pain.....
But, I pray you find light and inner spiritual peace in your heart, and let love guide you in God's name.....
Your heart always shines through every piece you write, and your improvement shows. This is very deep, emotional, and sad.....
A very well written piece.....
Be blessed poet.....
As always, Love, MoM
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Steven my dear friend, your poem always infected me the best. I hope you only the best of the best. It's sad, well it's more sad. Like many others in here, you have infect me too. Great poem Steven.
Wish you the best
Snow
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Shancy Fayre thank you much for reading my words i am glad you liked it.
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This is so wonderfully deep and filled with delicious metaphors. It was sad, it was happy and it was sad, again. I enjoyed reading your work. Shancy.
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golly, this piece moved me. i've finally figured out the way to truly fully grasp your poems, i read them out loud, and thtat's when i really get what you've written and that's when i feel as if my own heart is broken and that's when i feel as if there's a lump in my throat and that's when i feel like crying myself. there's so much to the words you write. gosh, it's mind-blowing!
Words written on
Pages of silk
With a million tears
Of angels
A gentle poem of how to love me
To ease my last piece
Peace never known to me
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deep and powerful poetry always enjoy your writes your talent shines with the words you write... you have not failed at this piece of work is wonderful and so well written loved this read I applaud you and your poetry !!!!
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wow this was a very well done piece very deep and sad though and it flowed soo well, thanks for sharing, and keep up the awesome poetry..
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ouch, i tell you what ouch, you did a great job on this poem, i mean i felt every word, keep it flowing
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Dear Steven,
Your heart always shines through every piece you write! I wish for you only the best of the very best
Love,
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res23 thank you much for the read and the comment.
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Good write. This poem seems very deep and emotional. I really like the flow of this poem. Overall, very well done. -
BxBxBx thank you much .. and to anyone who will listen hehehhe . thanks again.
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Very strong and heart felt. I liked it a lot. I think you've got some important things to say to people. And that's a good thing.
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toots thank you much for the wonderful comment. as you know my poems are very much about me. and things i go through. the way write. is differnt to everyone. differnt meanings. and oft times i suprise my self when i go back and read some of them..(lol) but really i appreciate everyone who takes time to read my words. i know sometimes i am confusing (or that my writing at least can be) i have now been writing for two years. and am still growing. i know that i can become a better writing. the way i write. isnt accepted by all but it is the way i write. thank you for your kind words. and for taking the timee to understand me and my writing(witch in essence is one and the same) thanks
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Good evening, Steven. I have read several of your poems before, and you are just consistently a wonderful writer! Long, short, funny, sad - they are all good. It's refreshing to see a man who can write serious poetry or smart-alek limericks, and maybe in the same day! This poem is long, but I read it all (have problems with comprehension of prose or long pieces of poetry that is a learning disorder). I enjoyed letting your words carry me along - sometimes because of their individual meanings, sometimes because of their imagery, sometimes because of the turn of the phrases. All in all - the poem made me feel like I was being carried. It's so comforting to be lifted from your own troubles - thank you for sharing this lovely poem here. Best, Toni
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allforlove123 thank you for reading my words and also for enjoying them i am glad to see you liked it.
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By the way it was the title that pulled me in to click...It was the perfect title for this piece...nice job...Trina.
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Wow!!! I love this. It captures what I think we all go through at times. You are good. Thank you and I am glad I clicked...Trina.
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bww thank you for your words and the read.
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this is quite a sad sad write and I understand completely steven sometimes there just isn't a damn thing you can do nor anyone else may your heart heal soon
love and light
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grannyeri thank you for the read and the insightful coment. i brought a ladder in with me. it will just take some time to climb back out.
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Heartfelt sentiments well expressed in these lines - we feel your sorrow and pain. Easy to read and understand the turmoil you are feeling and the uneasiness you are experiencing as you think like this. Deep, deep - hope you can climb out of this hole.
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moonlight thank you much . it means alot to have you read and enjoy my work. thanks
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very sad and tearfully, written, as I read with sadness and saw what you put into this post, great job, thank you for sharing and good luck ..
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Viyanna Rosemarie t6hank you my friend for the read and the comment. i am glad you liked this.
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As the last star falls
I also failed you
this is heartbreaking. i want to cry as i read these beautifully painful words from you. thank you for sharing your heart with me tonight. viyanna rosemarie
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