The screen door slams shut, cuts as a knife through the silence,
chases the calico cat from its bed under the weathered fence
the women,, no longer numb to words spewed out in hate,
unlike her callused feet, impervious to the broken slate
Wild flowers stretch towards the light through sun glistened spaces;
left speechless by their beauty; she stops and stares in their faces.
but a rooster's alarm startles her, as he wakes his sleeping friends;
she struggles to regain control, then moves on still trying to pretend
In the distance, a course, thick rope from an aging oak tree sways
like her childhood swing, invites her to come and fly away
promises she’ll soar over green hills and sunlit trees
out of harm's way, like balloons set free.
The sun kicks off it's misty blanket, unveils a church on the horizon;
a dew soaked cross, like a diamond reflecting, captures her attention.
remembers there is a love great enough to take away guilt and shame
once upon a time taught it was Christ who bore her penalty of pain
Words buried with those under the weathered stones, leave their wealth
judging her of worth, frees her from a sentence of death.
the deep wounds one day will heal, yet the scars will remain,
a reminder to tell the other wildflowers just how beautiful they are
Author notes
To all who have affected someone with their words- I had a lady on the next block from me teaching me precious truths from the Bible that still get me through and let me see myself as a beautiful wildflower!
Carly Pop
Written May 13th, 2006
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A contest entry
- Give Me Anything by YoungCutta29.
350 points, ended November 14, 2006, 56 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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you fill the mind with many movements of nature and many thoughts finally leading to hope ...well written ..
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Utterly Amazing in depth! I loved your thoughts Here! Your by all means a finalist!
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Wow.
This is a beautiful poem. I love it. It reminds us all that no matter what glass we may walk on, no matter how bitter life sounds or looks or seems, there is always hope in Christ.
A beautifully written piece indeed....
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Shancy was your judge for the contest… Because of the abundance of entries... we are having trouble getting two scores for each poem...I would just like to thank you anyway for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
~luminescence
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I really enjoyed reading this. It is a lovely job. Sadly, I must keep my comments short due to the volume of entries. Your score, then, Title: 8 Diction: 10 Syntax: 10 Wowness factor: 9 Total: 37. Thank you so much for entering and participating. Best of luck. Shancy.
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it is a long sentences. i guess that is your cup of tea the way you write your poems. -
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Can't stand the rhyming, but it's really good concerning word choice, content/plot. The last line should have been a bit shorter, I think, but it's good. -
(((AMEN TO THAT)))
This is just a wonderful write of truth.I loved the whole poem in its fullness. It just glows with a radiant sparkle of love.
It just amazes me how truth can be explained in many different way and forms. Good Penning Dear Poet.
God Bless
~Cheryl~
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This is Nice.
I believe this is one of my favorite kind of realigous poems. Because it's alot about finding yourself in a way. (or it was to me) My favorite part was the beggining and the end, i thought they were both very creative.
GOOD LUCK!
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I liked it alot. I love the metaphors, I really do. You have a great imagination and the beat was pretty sweet. I loved verse two, i thought it was unique.
Well great job and I pray you the best of luck.
Silence
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this is absolutly beautiful, i adore the last line, what a joy to read,all the wild flowers are beautiful, as they are true flowers, very well done, take care and keep writting. -
wonderful poem, thankyou for entering the contest and good luck, this poem is beautiful.
(i was wondering if it would be alright with you if i print off this poem to display in the support room, so that i can show people that i help when being bullied the poem)
please mail back
chardonnay
once again good luck -
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go right ahead!!!
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par excellance
Very nicely set down. Haven't read anything that focused my attention as this did in a very long time.
Beautifully formatted, with skillful rhymes. Sad,par excellance but a delight too!
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That was wonderful beyond words. I am speechless to say anything but this was inspiration and I absolutely loved it. RobinRae.
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amazing!!!
This was great. one of the most graphic (in a good way) poems that I have read in a while. YOu have an awesome gift. I felt like I was living in your poem. The words you use are amazing. You have a great poetic talent. Keep up the good work, I enjoyed this one! -
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An interesting interpretation on the image. I am very impressed with the vocabulary and imagery on this one. Definitely a contender in this contest. Thank you for entering and best wishes! Eris
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I enjoyed this poem very much. The images are crystal clear and beautiful. I do love the last line. It is wonderful. I wish you well in the contest. An aside...(course should be spelled coarse..a completely different meaning.) Warm Regards..vivela
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Wow, this is very beautiful. I like the subtlty of the poem. I especially lobe the last line.
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Words buried under the weathered stones, now leave their wealth
Judging her of value and worth, freeing her from a sentence of death.
The deep wounds would heal, yet she would remain with scars,
A reminder to tell the other wildflowers just how beautiful they are
Truly so deep and so thought provoking as well..showing the worth of the poet's endless capabilities of expressions here..A great work indeed...
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This is interesting. It was a little hard to follow, but when I did figure it out, I enjoyed it.
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"A reminder to tell the other wildflowers just how beautiful they are"
Very nice.
I like this poem very much and am gald I accidently clicked on it in the feature box. It is very well written and it flows well. I liked how the rhymes were suttle. It suits the tone of the poem much better then harsh, obvious rhymes
Thank you for the read
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