God
said this,
"Let it be,"
and it was so,
light.
Light
shot out
of God's hands,
into the dark,
bright.
Bright,
shining,
light of love,
from the heart of
God.
God
saw light,
it was good,
God sang for joy,
loud.
Loud,
joyful,
full of hope,
creation song,
praise.
Author notes
Well, it was supposed to be a lanturne.... I guess it's not, but I still like the one, two, three, four, one syllable form anyway.
Written May 13th, 2006
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Wonderful as always hon.
I'm sorry that I've kind of slacked off. I never meant to take this long of a sebatical, I'mma try being on at least once a week again. I just wanted to leave you some love and tell you you're in my thoughts and dreams all the time.
Love,
Sarah AKA LadyDragonWolfe -
This is remarkably good. The syllable form is gorgeous, I grant you that, but it feels so choppy, which is why I can't really use it. I never know where to chop the words ro syllables in order to keep it sounding good.
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nicey nice
this poem/song thing was very nicey nice! Liked how you ahd teh last word be teh first in next stanza! Very intersting view on the creatin of teh world! -
a very sing-song little poem here, a lanturne, i do not think i have ahd a go at one fo those yet
spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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This is beautiful.
WHERE THE HELL HAVE YOU BEEN?????
Hope you're ok - no more unanounced exiles - I was starting to worry and my big nose was starting to run. You really don't want dragon snot trailing from page to page of your work do you? -
As always your writing touches me like no other. Just wanted to tell you I love you and miss you tons and hope everything is going alright!
Love you TONS
Sarah -
Very nice write sis
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Excellent
Very well done Sis . Keep up the fantastic work 
Cheers
Kirk -
This is a very good write. I like the style that you used (lanturne), different and unique..
*Ktulu Blackwolfe*
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