LIVING WITHOUT YOU
These lonely few steps that I walk with you for the last time.
I hold your hand so tight reassuring me that you’re still mine.
My tears flow freely down my cheeks in sorrow.
How will I even be able to function tomorrow.
My heart aches as my life has been thrown all askew.
Knowing that the next day I will be living without you.
I will miss listening to your laughter and seeing your smile.
I will miss those long walks by the lake for miles.
I will miss how you touch my face and dry my tears.
I will miss how you hold me and extinguish my fears.
I will miss how you make love to me all through the night.
I will miss those long talks in the comforts of fire light.
I will miss sharing our secrets and being true friends.
I will miss listening to you talk while making amends.
I will miss looking into those sexy beautiful eyes.
I will miss feeling your strength between my thighs.
I will miss running my hand through your hair.
I will miss your tender kisses that show that you care.
I will miss the sound of your voice as you read my poems.
I will miss holding you even when your mind wanders and roams.
I will miss looking at you asleep on my bed.
I will miss loving you when your life has spread.
As the plane is being loaded I kiss you not wanting to let you go.
Your tears and mine mix together in an even flow.
I watch you wave to me as you board the plane.
How will my life ever be the same.
My stomach churns with the fact that I must start anew.
I will never forget you knowing I will be living without you.
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Written May 13th, 2006
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Thanks Guin for reading glad you enjoyed this one. Your a sweetie.
Love yah,
CK -
heartwrenching and painfully sad
Oh Ck I could feel your heartache and your tears as I read this piece. It was beautifully written and it flowed perfectly. You know I feel your pain here brother. The back ground you picked for it fit perfectly too and I loved it.
You are a talented work of art buddy.
Love ya,
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Thank you cynthia for reading this one, I'm glad you liked it. I'll add you to my favs so can read more of yours.
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Excellent
This is such a heart tugging piece of work.
I too, didn't know if she was leaving or dying.
Did did a wonderful job with this write.
Keep on penning.
*S* Cynthia -
Hi sorry I didn't respond right away, I've been gone the last three days. Glad you enjoyed this poem and thank you for your kind words and for reading it.
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i came giving thanks for the kind words you shared for my write "my sexual chant". i am delighted to here how this played upon your mind. thank you once again from my heart to yours for peaking at this poem that is so dear to me. i love what you have written here. it's sorrow fills me up. i feel that tear you impressively were able to capture. until the end, i wasn't sure if she was dying or leaving. an essence of suspense. great write
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This is so sad, such a heart-wrenching piece. The repition of "I will miss..." is a little distracting because it happens so often. Still, the poem as a whole, is full of such strong emotion that you've managed to convey so well through your choice of words. Thanks for entering and best of luck. Take care, Heather x
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Thank you for reading my poem and your kind words.
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Letting go is such hard and certainly painful. One can certainly feel the heartache in your words. This is a great piece~!
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bravo!
Such anguish in this piece. How do you then, say goodbye, to all that moved your world in what is, only a few moments? Ah. I don't know. Such a moving verse. Excellent flow and rhythm. A pleasure to have read. Thank you for sharing. ~Pam -
Thank you very much for reading and enjoying my poem. I appreciate your kind words and thoughts.
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Beautiful
I used to think poems that rhyme every two lines like this sounded sort of childish but when it's done so well, it's beatiful. I never had to pause or reread, it flows so perfectly. It seems that with such long sentences, that would be really difficult, but it looks like it was easy for you.
And of course it's very touching and sounds so honest, all those thoughts of the little things you won't have anymore when someone goes away.
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Thank you TearsofRoses, I'm glad you liked it and appreciate your comments.
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Just a heart stopping poem
wonderfully written
Roses to you
TearsofRoses
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Thanks Angellover you're comments are always welcome
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this was so touching and it makes me always want to cry it is like sayin goodbye, wow, thanks for sharing and keep up the awesome poetry...
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Thanks for reading my poem, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Wonderful job and since you wowed my sister u know u wowoed me. This is a beautiful write and is so on topic it is scary. Great Job!and good luck in the contest!!!!
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Glad you liked it. I always enjoy reading your poems too. Thanks
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Awwww Wow
Omg WOW. This is....WOW. I had to stop at points to make sure I wasn't crying. I always love your work but this is so amazing Ck. You capture the essence of love leaving so well. Ahhhh...I don't know what to say. The repitition puts the power of the longing into it. And the descrbiing words are great.... And the beginning and end are perfect. Like all the "I Will Miss" thoughts are the girls last thoguhts before he leaves. As she's dreading he leaves...*sigh*
Wonderful job. You seem to know exactly how I feel. Good luck in my contest.
xxxx, April♥
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