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Invisible Scars



Creating a fairytale, a place for my escape
Alone and imprisoned within my own mind
Nowhere to run or hide, drowning in shame
Shattering mirrors, loathing self reflections


 

Upon my own mental blackboard
Memories written in invisible ink
Illuminated beneath a black light
he horrific tale of stolen innocence

 

Cowering in the shadows of self blame
Silently screaming from within a self hell
Slowly dying, fading into nothingness
Growing numb from his satanic touch


Taking what is mine, a piece of me
Never can it be returned, gone forever
ounded vessel of flesh and bone heal
Invisible scars upon the soul for eternity

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Written May 13th, 2006

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    December 30, 2006

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    Strong piece and excellent imgery to this one. It creates an assualt of the senses, slowly easing you in and then shattering part of you. Awesome piece.


  • TearsintheMirror
    December 16, 2006
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    Thank you for this poem and for picking to enter my contest.


  • Kari gold member
    December 4, 2006

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    Yep...all of us seem to take the self blame from the past and things that happened and went on...I really can relate to this piece.
    Kari


  • john magro
    November 3, 2006
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    VERY WELL DONE

    thank you for sharing this beautiful poem,a very good piece


  • Faerie.Princess
    September 11, 2006
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    this is a beautiful poem and was just wat i was looking for. i loved your pictures. they tied in with your poem well. beautiful poem. good luck in the contest and keep writing
    Thankyou For Entering


  • BeautifulBirdie
    August 19, 2006
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    Very nicely done. I thank you for sharing this with me. I wish you the best of luck in my contest.


  • Bellas Babes
    August 14, 2006
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    love it! great work!


  • Erotik Rose silver member
    August 14, 2006
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    Very good poem emotional anf deep, good luck in the contest.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 3, 2006
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    Sad and so dark. Very well written. You expressed these emotions and feelings very well. Thank you for sharing. Jeannie D


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    May 15, 2006
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    Sweetling, I love you to death sis, but you really need to get out of my head... this one hit really close to home and blew me away. Fantastic writing, very emotional, provocative and self-revealing. I love the work. Hugs and loves sis


  • Goddess of illusion
    May 14, 2006
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    Excellent

    Excellent, I love the entire poem,
    this part touched me the most.
    "Upon my own mental blackboard
    Memories written in invisible ink
    Illuminated beneath a black light
    The horrific tale of stolen innocence"
    Keep it up


  • Blazing White Wolf
    May 14, 2006
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    oh this is a sad and dark piece you have penned and invisable scars that we all have in various shapes and sizes wuite the deep and insightful write with such wonderful imagery bravo!
    love and light
    blaze


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 13, 2006
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    Most intensely excellent, sister girl! I wish you the best of the best!


  • LadyUnique silver member
    May 13, 2006
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    very good job you've done here. this poem is soaked with loneliness and loss yet it's not over done. this is just the right length too. very nicely done
    i applaud the poet and the poem


  • ScarletO gold member
    May 13, 2006
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    Your words and thoughts flow so well as if they have waited a lifetime to share these words.

    These lines
    "The horrific tale of stolen innocence
    Cowering in the shadows of self blame" reveal perhaps abuse from the past that is still haunting at times to this soul.

    I admire this write for it tells and explains what many feel but do not have the ability to reveal so affectively. My heart is in union with this author and all she feels and dreads within her heart. May God Bless your soul.


  • Infinite Butterfly
    May 13, 2006
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    Wow. Truly a great write. I love the description and emotions put into this. The picure is also very self telling alone. Great Job and good luck with your writings.

    ~Drowning Flame~


  • elemental angel
    May 13, 2006
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    Just wanted to say that I think the dark imagery you employ throughout this is piece is fantastic, Such a sad piece. Well done and keep up the good work. Best of luck in the contest


  • Your Messiah
    May 13, 2006
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    Wow. I could really feel the desperation and lonely. The atmosphere you've set up here is just outstanding and I believe the picture you've chosen helps a lot, as well. Well done.

    -Cory
    .x


  • Ami amour
    May 13, 2006
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    This is a fantastic piece of work, I love dark poetry and scars are forever embedded and can not be removed no matter how hard you try. This is captivating and keeps the readers attention to the end. Well done


  • GunRunner
    May 13, 2006
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    This was a very nice read. I can see where some might find it deeply disturbing, but I like that it ends on an inspiring note. Very Nice.


  • real irish rose
    May 13, 2006
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    This was such a powerful write the words jumped off the screen as I was reading ....amazing !!!
    Well written and indeed a pleasure to read...well done xxx


  • Am8ur
    May 13, 2006
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    very deep peice. i was breath takin. the imagery is wonderfully done and selected. keep up the great work hey.

    i would give you an applaud but i am out and i am also out of points. sorry.

    pat yourself on the back. you deserve it.


    Til


  • leakypen
    May 13, 2006
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    This poem is so deep and sad, it is a truly powerful write, Mim x

  • whoops
    May 13, 2006
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    great

    WOW, this is really something


  • DancingRed
    May 13, 2006
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    Wow. You must be proud of this fantastic deep piece of poetry. Each of the lines just flows so smoothly and it's filled with a dark sort of magical beauty.
    The last two lines were most powerful:

    "Wounded vessel of flesh and bone heal
    Invisible scars upon the soul for eternity"

    DancingRed.

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