Nothing will go wrong,
When I'm lying next to you.
To hold your body next to me,
is like a lovers' song.
I love the little things you do,
and all that we will be.
Never in a million years,
have I dared to dream like this.
You're my everything my dear.
My life, my soul, my bliss.
I hate it when were apart,
so please don't go away.
I love your beautiful smile,
it warms my open heart.
I need you here to stay,
more than just a little while.
Never in a million years,
have I dared to dream like this.
Your my everything it's clear.
My life, my soul, my bliss
With you I feel like I'm a new man.
You make me want to change.
I'll always be right here for you.
I'll love you like no one else can.
This feeling I have is so strange.
For you there's nothing I wouldn't do.
Never in a million years
have I dared to dream like this.
Never in a million years
have I ever felt such bliss.
Never in a million years
have I needed someones kiss
Your kiss
bliss like this
In a list
A contest entry
- ~~~~Give me your BEST -- OPEN TO EVERYONE!~~~~ by Jade-.
550 points, ended February 27, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Love Poetry Ever Written!!!! Give Me All of Your Passion!!! by Eulb kcalB.
350 points, ended March 28, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is very nice. Very sweet and positive. I enjoyed it.
Thanks for entering my contest, good luck!
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Awh, this is such a beautiful write. I could really feel the lyrical sense in this, and I liked that. Your rhyming was done well and I can relate. Love is a wonderful thing, and you've expressed it nicely.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is so beautiful.
'Never in a million years
have I needed someones kiss
Your kiss
bliss like this.'
You have written this from the heart and it flows so nicely. Thanks for entering my contest, Cathy
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Loverly
I like the repeated "never in a million", but looked for more variation for the noun. You used Miles in the title, then stuck with years in the poem. The opportunity to have a million heartbeats, kisses, sunsets, etc. would have expanded this for me. The rhyme pattern was an interesting choice that works well with alternate length verses.
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The emotion just leaps off of the page! Truly it is amazing when we find that one that takes us beyond what we could have dreamed ourselves! Beautifully penned!
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I love your repeating stanza and the conclusion. They were beautiful, sweet, and to the point of your affection. But what I wasn't crazy about was the abcabc rhyming. It's harder to flow that well and make it sound unforced. But I applaud the effort.
Thanks for your entry!
WWW* -
Beautiful. Perfect for the contest, this really reminds me of someone. Good job.
Thanks for entering,
-Dlvvanzor -
I'm sure your fiancée loved this. This really seems like the way Rory and my Mother feel about each other. Greatly done, thank you for entering.
Chelsea
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Awww how sweet. This was a good poem, in my opinion... The repeating lines added feeling to it.... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Thank you so much for entering! Best wishes to you in the contest!
Just a reminder, PLEASE do not respond to this comment! Thanks!!!
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Nice rhyme scheme. I liked how you shortened some lines. It gave them emphasis. Good luck.
Avec Chance~ Jonny Rockets
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This was a very sweet and heartfelt poem, and I could read your emotions through it. I thought the rhyme was a little sloppy however, but if you cleaned it up, I think it would be really great. Good job.
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An excellent poem, and romantic...i loved your words... love the little things you do, and all that we will be. Great write. sj
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Very Good!
Score:
Subject:3.5
Rhyming:2.0
Flow:2.5
Total:8.0
This was good and interesting to read.Thanks for your entry and best of luck in the contest! -
this is a beautiful write... such emotion and caring... i am engaged to the most amazing woman i have ever met and when a poem can trigger the emotion i feel when i think of her, than i believe it to be an awesome write... you did just that... thank you for reminding me (as if i could ever forget) of all the love i have for my fiance... this was an excellent piece... i wish you the best of luck in life, love, and the contest... amazing write!!!
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Thank you all for your positive remarks. I took a little break from Love poems as I still have lots of pent up stuff that i must deal with
The one and only -Billy the Kid- -
a nice sweet write, plaine and simple love wich is sometimes difficult to put into words and to keep it origional. it has a nice form and it fits in well with the topic. i got some lovely images from this it has a really good calm vibe.
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This is so sweet, protective and understated. Its warm, reassuring and written in the kinda narrative that makes you gooey inside.
~Faded -
Sweet and Tender
Adorable tribute to love and the upcoming marriage. This is very sweet ~ without being sappy ~ if you know what I mean
(BTW, sometimes you spell it million {correct} and sometimes millioin {oops!}) Thought you might want to run it through spellcheck real quick and spiff it up before contest judging
Enjoyed the repetition of ~million years~ emphasizes your message. Good luck in the contest!
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This is a really beautiful piece of writing which I really enjoyed reading !!
Well written and indeed a pleasure to read xx -
wonderful
i really love this piece a lot!thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem with us.. -
This is so beautiful, and very emotionaly written: a perfect description of what love should be like. I very much connected to this piece, at least it described when I was actually happy in life. Oh well, hopefully I'll find something like this again. Beautiful work.
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First let me thank you for your lovely comment on " my little child ". now back to you rpoem, it really is beautiful. such strong love within your words. you show that love truly is grand. this is a very amazing write, it is touching and warm. you have done a great job on this
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i read this when it was featured but my computer shut down. i did not want you to think i was wasting your points. i am glad i was able to find it. had your name not been so memorable, i probably would not have. this is really awesome. i think that you will not need any luck in this contest that you have entered. thank you for sharing this with me.
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I agree with everyone else, This is an amazing poem and I really enjoyed reading it. You did a great job!!! It is really beautiful!!
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What a beautiful write. I am a sucker for the love poems. It is a great feeling to be in love with love. I enjoyed this so much I will be checking out more of your work.Thank you for sharing it with us and I wish you the best..Please let me know what your children think of The Fairy Flu...Thanks...Trina.
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Very heartwarming, but slightly cliched on some points, no offense, but love is a very overdone subject, I usually do not write of, because it is difficult to get a new view on it. (I am not a hypocrite, I do have a column on it)
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real nice write your love shines with these words you write and your talent I might add this is a wonderful write...
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I love this, it's a wonderful write!! I absolutely love it!!!
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Oh my this beautiful, excellent job and congrats on winning the silver. God bless, Brenda
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Thanx, yes I did mean we're, I'm usually such a nazi grammar.I just read you Bio, fellow introvert.You should look up my poem , Impressions of me. I don't expect you to comment or anything, but i think you might enjoy the inward side of it
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First, thank you so much for the comments you left on a couple of my poems. Second, I am SO in love right now, so this poem really hit home for me. Love is such a great feeling, and you've captured it beautifully in just a few lines.
In the line:
"I hate it when were apart,"
I think you meant "we're" ? It's such a minor thing that I hesitate to even mention it.
This is really lovely, it just gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling when I read it. Thank you for sharing it with all of us here on AP.
All the best,
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Really Great! I'm happy to see you're not afraid to dream! Best of luck in the competition, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
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Thank you all for the wonderful replies. i actually wrote this song for my girlfriend a couple of days ago and thought it fit nicely here.
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Very nice write Billy very romantic you described a perfect couple that is so much in love this was well written and beautifully penned good luck in the contest
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I think this is a really good song as there is a strong chorus line repeating. I hope you do well in the contest. Robi
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I like the structured rhyme of this poem and the alternating pattern in the stanzas. It is a very nice love poem. Thank you for choosing to enter our contest.
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very good
Oh this was really beautiful ...Very good ... Thanks for the entering .
Be Well
Crystal -
This is a beautiful song with such romance and sentiment, and done so tastefully. It flows really nice, and one of the lines in your chorus really hit me well:
"Never in a million years
have I dared to dream like this"
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I loved this and I think it would be great put to music as well. Great flow and rhytem and wonderful sentiments! Bunny
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great job! A touching tribute to a loved one...your words flow easily and create a nice tone for this piece...well done. A thoroughly enjoyable read.
Rory -
Beautiful, Moving
OMG, that is so beautiful. I thought my wedding song was beautiful (makes me cry all the time). Have you ever considered possibly promoting music through your poetry? You would make a great lyricist (i think i spelt that wrong). Great job and keep up the excellent work!
hugs,
heather
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