I Fail
These words now
This moment
Out of meaning
This all feels so strange
As my writing
Defies
As it will entertain its own very demise
My pages seem forgiven to me
The sun lights the phantom
Ghostly words that once meant so much to me
See the sun set
As they lose they’re meaning
Forgotten to me
Be taken as wonder
Or mere coincidence
A whim or decision
Can it be?
Written as what you read
I was once a fruited tree
Words used to just flow from me
Consuming transforming the immense barrier
Consuming transforming the ocean
Consuming transforming the mind
Now just consuming me
Beyond
Control
I
Fail to find the words
...
That once belonged to me
Steven Mels
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Written May 12th, 2006
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beautiful.. it seems that words do not fail in this poem although you seem to say so.. I love the way you repeat "consuming" and the phrase "The sun lights the phantom Ghostly Words that once meant so much to me".. I love that..this is a great piece keep it up.
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I love the flow of the poem - very interesting structure and word choice.
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Great Expression
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I love how well written this poem is. It's a great poem and catchy title. Great flow in this piece. Keep up the great work, God bless
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Wow...so much emotion...I love it...really. I'm speechless...Great job. Keep it flowing, pops.
Tawni -
You did a beautiful job with this write. You expressed your emotions and feelings supberbly. Keep the great writing.
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very well done and very well expressed emotions as well, thanks for sharing, and keep up the awesome poetry here...
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EXCELLENT JOB!!!!!
My dear sweet Steven:
Yoi have written a piece that shows the values you have and carry within yoursefl..... Those values show exactly how you are, an honest man with lots of virtues, a loving man.
You depiction of loss and the finding of same. The emotions were felt thoughout yhe piece and carried on a clear and wocnderfully constructed message.....
I am proud of reading your work as many times possible, becuase I can read and leran from a wonderful man about his feelings and his Love for life; as well as his appreciation of same.....
Be blessed with love and light, and may the power and love of our Lord be always at your side to guide you and spare you of all evil. I love you son, always.....
MoM 
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very nice and great points you posted within this poem,feelings of loss and then finding? good overall write, thank you for sharing and good luck..Linda
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Great Poem, Good flow.. And incredible mood
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Interesting free form and good flowing verses are leading us from your inner feelings to the world outside, where you have to live with your past and your experiance. Great done
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Sweetie, you still write some of the best poetry I've ever read! I love you dearly, hon!
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Ahhhh, but you still bear much fruit on that tree, my friend. These words seemed to flow from you just fine. This is a wonderful write. You haven't lost your muse, you just lost one subject to write about. Blessings! Susan
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you did a wonderful job on this poem, it is kind of sad, but it is also something else, keep it flowing
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awe good still i am glad you rad my words and not just this poem but all the ones you have. it means alot.
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breeze thank you. i am glad you liked it. i am at a point of either writing more or not at all. it all sounds that same anymore. but i thank you for the read and the comment. i am glad you enjoyed it.
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there's no need to thank me, when someone's as wonderful writer as you, i should be the one thaning you.
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i love the structure of this poem. the short lines are more effective than if you had used longer ones. they bring more focus to the issue at hand. how you've ended is particularly good because it gives a sense of finality---it doesn't leave the poem hanging.
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Goodolenad thank you much for reading and commenting on my words. i appreciate it much.
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how can you say the words no longer belong to you? they are more yours now than they have ever been. i am completely able to understand fully what you are saying in this one, there's so much to it. even writing about writer's block is wonderful. thank you for writing such a wonderful piece.
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Steven this is awesome! I sometimes feel that way also. This is a very deep and beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it with me! Keep up your great work my friend!
Allen0826 -
Vheissu thank you for reading my words i am glad you liked them.
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awesome, nice job. i am sorry that i do not have much more than that to say.
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mom i am ok. ... just lost of myself and wandering for things that are a puzzle to me. things that no longer make sence. but i am ok. i am glad to see you around. hope you are well.
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Oh! baby boy this is heart wrenching. Yes hon you still have the words and they are more powerful than ever. Stay in touch let your mama know how you are doing.
Mama Linda
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Xandressa thank you much for the read and your kind words.
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very good
Wow, I really liked this. The ending had a very powerful wrap up, and it was a very deep poem. I enjoyed this very much. ^.^
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