In the month of November of 2005,
We lost something very important, and it made me cry,
I will never forget the pain I had,
When I think about it, it makes me mad,
Me and my family will always remember the fun we had,
But it still will make us feel sad,
We lost everything yet we all still have each other,
Then at first we had nothing, now we feel kind of smothered,
Thanks to good others,
I will never forget the day
That I was sent away
The look on my mom and dad's face
It makes me feel that they need space
I want some answers from the tragic we had
But still I cannot be mad
For things happen for a reason
There is still hope and a fresh new season.
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Written May 12th, 2006
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NEED MORE WORK!!!
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Yes, this poem, I like. It's more metaphoric (to me it is, lol) and its really deep. I have noticed in your work that you need to work on your grammar though, like when it said "I want some answers from the TRAGIC we had," that would be tragedy or tragic incedent or something. But other then grammar, Good Write
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I'm sorry about that, it is good that you are still holding on to hope, some people just let themselves fall, good job on the write!
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Good write! lol. seriously, good job
work on yr grammer just a little bit, but othere then that, i like it
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