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Anger Management

This nightmare is becoming even more hellish
Awake in my tomb it is the pain that I relish
An already sad tale to tell and embellish
It is my love story, such as it is

It started with a blade, an unconditonal friend
Then a prescription for peace that had no end
Finally a woman that knew just how to pretend
It is my love story, such as it is.

First I played, licked it up, the blood, the cum
Swallowed the pills and her lies she told to have fun.
Against my better judgement I even laid out in the sun
It is my love story, such as it is.

Slowly things changed, but even I held out hope
Now I spend a hundred dollars a week buying dope
Alone and cutting just trying to cope
It is my love story, such as it is.

I tried to stop, but one fix feeds the fire
The blood, the tears, this burning desire
To fuck her hard and call her a liar
It is my love story, such as it is.

I'm tired now that I've failed them all
These  tests of life, now I'm ready to fall
Into the abyss it is your name I will call
It is my love story, such as it is.

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  • Midnight Breeze
    November 14
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    Nice! Thanks for entering!


  • prankstar
    November 11
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    wow......this was amazing. Really...it's so sad. And so well written. Thank you so much for entering in my contest.

    ---prankstar


  • Poetess12
    October 31

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    I like how you use the words "Such as it is" in your poem It adds to it in a way that tells one just how it is as you feel it.

    You did a great job on this poem.

    Thank you very much for your entry.


  • masked-monster
    October 26

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    powerful

    This was a very powerful poem, at first I wasnt sure what toi think, but I like it. Thanks for entering my contest and I wish you good luck!


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 18

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    This was really interesting and it was really well written. It was nicely done. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Reanna Eryn
    March 23
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    Interesting...I like this. Beautiful.


  • Shelby K
    February 9
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    interesting poem but not what im looking for . sorry.


  • Jfd
    January 17
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    interesting write, it was raw and intense....thank you for entering


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 12
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    Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • ToxicSuicide
    January 10

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    Thank you so much for entering. Of all the poems, this is one of the hardest to hit my heart. It honestly made it ache. I love it. Best of luck to you.
    ~ToxicSuicide.


  • ChunkyC
    December 22, 2008

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    This is so heartfelt.. And so sad.. It's good though. I liked your rhyme scheme, it was good. And the way you repeated the last line really hit hard. Great write and thanks for entering, Good luck.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 6, 2008

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    The innocent so taken

    I hear you and so many today have begun against their better judgment and have fallen with those who drew you into their lair for they need more and to find a new person helps them buy their drugs . In this time you have written this piece I need to tell you you can walk away from it .You still have the desire to become you once again and live without this pain .You say it stops the pain when in reallity it feeds it . It makes the mind numb while it does its work and for each fix eats away from the mind .Get yourself into a rehab and when you come out you go to alcoholics annonymous and never stop going they have people that will help you i the tough times they will become the ones to set you free of this monster you are carrying within . I am here if you would like to talk and I can tell you stories of my nephew who on cocain has been near beat to death several times and if you dont choose help its the future you have ahead .Why choose to die when you can live please choose to live for the heart is capable of many loves imagine what it would be like to find this perfect love who is free of drugs and smiles all the time have children of your own . Talk to me


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    October 16, 2008

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    Oooh can so relate. This is me the last couple of weeks I swear - if I have to deal with another persons personal issues I will explode.


  • Shannon62875
    October 14, 2008

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    WOW!

    This is a very good write... You also have won a lot of trophes!! Keep up the great work and good luck1

    shannon*leah


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    I can certainly see why this has placed so well in many contests. Thank you for your entry & best of luck in the contest.


  • LOVELYmurder
    September 22, 2008
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    Good job. I can relate to this almost 100% Great job and good luck in the contest.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 24, 2008

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    -This nightmare is becoming even more hellish
    Awake in my tomb it is the pain that I relish
    An already sad tale to tell and embellish
    It is my love story, such as it is
    ...

    Ohkay, so I just have to say that I LOVE your rhyme scheme in this poem :] It was just so. Wow. I don't even know. None of your rhyming seemed to be forced at all, which was great to read, and your words were just so raw and wow. I loved everything about this poem. I can see why it won so many trophies. I hope you're doing good, now =] Keep it up, you have a definite talent for writing. Thanks for entering ♥


  • eightball666
    August 19, 2008

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    Very good. I especially like the repetition of the last lines in each stanza. Every time I read those words, it hit me harder, and deeper. Good job and good luck.


  • God is my reality
    August 4, 2008

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    Great Rhyme Scheme, the flow isn't the smoothest, but in some stanzas it is a lot more smooth, but if you can find a way to straighten it out, that'd make it a lot better. It's a really sad poem.


  • x meerz
    July 3, 2008

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    i see 'emo' in it alot.
    but i must admit it was good.

    thanks for entering and good luck>3


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    Beautiful use of form, you have penned such eloquent tears upon this page. Thank you for gracing us with your words, and good luck.

    Laura x


  • LullabyxxDreamer
    July 3, 2008
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    great write, thanks for entering, good luck!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 1, 2008

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    Very well composed and written with excellent flow of the rhyming verse---Very Well deserving of all the awards!!


  • Voodoo Eyes
    June 23, 2008

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    Wonderful write! The emotion is very strong. The flow was good also. It ties in with the prompt very well. Thank you!

  • kales4
    June 18, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest. This poem was interesting. I really enjoyed the lines "tried to stop, but one fix feeds the fire
    The blood, the tears, this burning desire
    To fuck her hard and call her a liar"
    And i also enjoy the repition of the last line. I felt however that some of the rhymes were forced and comprimised the flow of the poem. Great write and good luck


  • unanswered
    June 14, 2008

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    This was amazing. I.... I don't know what to say. It was intense and its flow was masterful. Searching for imperfections and there was none. It was brillant. Thank you for entering, Good luck in the contest.


  • emo001
    June 12, 2008
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    heh *bunny*


  • SomethingPoetic
    June 12, 2008

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    simply amazing. you have given such insight too how a bad relationship can ruin a life. How it can make you do things you have never done before. I feel for you man, I hope you can get clean soon and that everything works out for you!

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