Closer... come to me, let me
Haunt your desires as you
Ache for fulfillment. Sparks
Ignite from deep inside, your
Needs and wants become one. I'll
Elicit your cries of pain and pleasure,
Driving you to the edge of lost control.
Enter my vortex, and be still. You have
Mastered the skill, the
One to make me crumble before you.
Taste the sweetness,
Intoxicating your being. Drink my
Opalescent pleasures, indulging your inner lust.
Nourish your beastly wants,
Satisfying the hunger of two lovers.
5/12/06
Author notes
Ummm, option 2 and a bit of 1ish combined?
Written May 12th, 2006
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I like the background very much. Some imagery would have been nice in this poem.
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Thank you for the comments, apprciate it.
Storm -
Congratulations
Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning the Silver. Interesting background. Not much more that I could say that others haven't said better. Congratulations again.
Amythest -
Thank you. I appreciate the compliment and the comment
Storm -
MY dear your writing is consistent and powerful, i really respect that in a poet, nice!
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Restroom? Sheesh! That COULD be offensive, if I didn't know better.
Thanks for the comments hun, appreciate it.
Storm -
Yeesh, Storm. This is good. Ya know, mine don't affect me at all, but yours...Damn. Anway, uh a good poem. Now I gotta go. Latersssssss. (Runs to restroom)
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Thank you, appreciate your comments
Storm -
hot, HOt, HOT!!!! Well done!!
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Thank you, thank you. Appreciate your comments.
Storm -
Arousing
Dark erotica? or seductive arousal? matters not, this was sneaky steamy. Enough of that, very unique with beautiful flow. The acrostic was a bonus to further demonstrate your talent. wonderful piece! Take care! -
Thank you for your comments, much appreciated
Storm -
I didn't even realize it was an acrostic until i read Intanglio's comment. In any event this was a fabulous acrostic and I enjoyed the read immensly
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Thank you Tang, appreciate your kind comments.
Storm -
Dear StormGoddess,
An amazing acrostic, I almost missed it, because it flowed and opened up so easily. Beautiful writing! Good Luck in the contest.
Tang -
Thanks for the comments, appreciate your kind words.
Storm -
Well done great job as usual from you. Yummy, darkened arousals! I like that. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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Thanks Val. Yes, a little bit of my darkened arousals. Deep desires I suppose. Just a bit on the lonely edge today, and so I felt I could get something in there for your contest with that. Appreciate your comments.
Storm -
Alright. I see this has a bit of your side of emotions mingled with a bit of someone else's. Nicely done. Took me a few to grasp the title and why you had chosen it. But I see your off running your acrostics again. Read it again, and hit me like a ton of bricks. Makes sense now. Like the depth, bit dark and a bit sensual. So yea, it fits in both cats. Good luck in the contest.
~Val
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