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Feel Me(Erotiku)

Amongst those nights
moans eliciting vaulted
bliss

Long sated rapture
shadows whisper alongside
touches gone
unwavered

Author notes

Art: Under the Sheets
Artist: Luis Royo
In case picture can't be used here on AP:
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Note: this was just another new form that just simply popped inside my head.

Concept:  Just like a haiku, an erotiku takes the formulation of a haiku however the only differene is that together the syllabic count comes to a total number of thirty or thirty-six
Written May 12th, 2006

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  • MagicaI
    May 15, 2006
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    Whoa..I think the picture deserves a 9.9 and the sentences deserve a 9.9 too!

    from your group,

    H U G Z

    Vladmir


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 12, 2006
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    Wonderful piece, loved the form and flow. the picture presentation is awesome as well. Keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny


  • Nancygal
    May 12, 2006
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    very subtle; i liked it


  • B Chandler
    May 12, 2006
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    ROFL apparently I can use the picture if the mods havent said anything ..........yet


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 12, 2006
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    EXCELLENT!!!

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