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~Lost Souls and Wounded Hearts~

I will stand for…


 …the veteran who served his country who’s now sitting in a wheelchair

 …the mother with hungry kids who doesn’t have a dime to spare

 …the man who busts his ass daily and will never be a millionaire

 …the lady crying herself to sleep because she’s knows about the affair

I will fight for…


 …the homeless teens who walk the streets, their bodies they are selling

 …the kids hiding in their rooms because their daddy’s drunk and yelling

 …the ones so starved for attention, they’re running away and rebelling

 …the ones who hurt each other with the lies that they are telling

I will stand for…


 …the sad, lonely ones who can’t cope, so they become drug addicts

 …the people who screwed up once in life, now they’re labeled convicts

 …the little ones molested and all the pain that it inflicts

 …the outcasts desperately wishing just to be part of the cliques

I will fight for…


 …the devoted evangelical folks preaching the gospel truth

 …the teachers working hard trying to educate our youth

 …the old lady waiting patiently outside the voting booth

 …the old man on the corner with his brown bag of vermouth

I will stand for…


 …the girl with the lemonade stand, raising money to fight cancer

 …the single mother trying to support her kids as an exotic dancer

 …the shy dyslexic boy in class who doesn’t know the answer

 …the young man wearing colors because he wants to be a gangster

I will fight for…


 …the tiny babies born addicted from a pregnancy unplanned

 …the brave soldiers fighting overseas and dying for this land

 …the rape victim telling her gruesome story on the witness stand

 …the woman broken and bleeding from her own husband’s hand


Don't look past these people, look into their eyes, see their plight


For all the lost souls and wounded hearts, I will stand up and fight



Author notes

This poem is a description of who and what means the most to me, simply put - the human race, all of society, all of us, no matter who we are, what we are, we are all important. I hope it will work for your contest.


Written May 12th, 2006

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  • tawk gold member
    August 17, 2007
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    Hood-Winked!

    Lori what a wonderful write. I commend you for writing this. I could not pick out a favorite part. I too believe that everyone needs to be heard and helped. Your poem touched me very deeply. Well deserving of the Golds.

    You have just been Hood-Winked by a fellow Bandit


  • Emo Cowboy14
    May 23, 2007

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    umm. this isnt what i was looking for. but the poem is realy good. but i just dont think it is what i want. but thanks.


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 28, 2007

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    Congratulations onyour gold trophy. This piece is most deserving of it.


  • Ryno
    April 19, 2007

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    I'm not sure if I like the structure of this and all the spacing. It hurts the eye and the flow, even a little. But it is interesting and tells us a lot. It is quite a beauty. Thanks for entering Prewrites & for sharing. Best wishes.
    ~Ryan~


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    April 17, 2007
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    You said it all, sister. Great write.


  • love my jose luis
    April 17, 2007
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    I will tell you you definately have a chance at first in my contest. I think that you did a great job on this poem and I can see why you have won contests with it before, I have been in some of those situations myself and I think that if I wasn't so tired right now I would've started crying.
    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
    ~Alix


  • Bedroom Eyes
    March 25, 2007
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    WOW!

    There is nothing better than someone with sound moral fiber. Someone who not only talks the talk, but walks the walk. This piece was simple astounding. I salute not only the write itself, but the astounding woman in whom these things are her way of life.


  • free2bfly
    March 13, 2007

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    OMGGGGGGGG wow i am so glad 2 loose 2 a great like u.. i was the second place winner... BUT WOW.. U KNOCKED THE BALL OUT OF THE PARK.. the boy in colors tryna b a gangster.. i luved it all!!!!!!!!!!!!!!>. keep writing.. keep doing you.. keep it uppppppp!!!!. wuved it all!!!!!!!!!!!!!.. YAY U!!!!!!!!!!!


    • -Ink Artist-
      March 13, 2007
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      Thanks bfly for the awesome comment! Much appreciated! Glad you like this piece!


      ~Lori


  • Zanark
    March 13, 2007

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    ...ow....ow....this will be added to finalist list first... i need to just go change a rule in my contest so i can allow this

    • -Ink Artist-
      March 13, 2007
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      Thanks Zanark! I'm happy you like this piece! I really appreciate the great comment and I appreciate you allowing this piece in your contest!


      ~Lori

  • vasi
    February 16, 2007

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    I like the message of this poem. I don't thing it is right for a person in prison that has served his time to be labeled as a convict. Twice in jail that is diffrent. Something is up, and needs to be identified. The true fact is the people in prison, the drug dealers and the murders. Almost every single one doesn't have above an 8th grade education. Most don't do these things because they want to, they have no other choice. I also thought this poem was very creative. Message me if you want your score and make srue to include the name of your poem.


  • -Ink Artist-
    October 12, 2006
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    Thanks so much, Chief! It's much appreciated! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece!

    ~Lori~

  • Chief Callahan
    October 12, 2006
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    Two thumbs up

    This is nothing less than excellent. You are very worthy and deserving of all the applause that you've received. Good luck in the contest.

  • -Ink Artist-
    August 31, 2006
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    Thanks so much buggirl for the sweet comment on this piece! It's much appreciated! If only everyone would stand up and fight for the indignities in this world, it would be a much nicer place. Thanks again for reading! Take Care!!

    ~Lori~


  • buggirl
    August 31, 2006
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    This is a really beautiful concept, and I think it is wonderful that you would stand up for these people. Nice job.
    Jen

  • -Ink Artist-
    August 30, 2006
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    Thanks so much wakingdevil for the comment!! It's greatly appreciated!! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece!!

    ~Lori~


  • wakingdevil
    August 30, 2006
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    Brilliant!Thanks for entering and best of luck

  • -Ink Artist-
    August 27, 2006
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    Thanks so much grannyeri for the kind words!! It's much appreciated!! I feel we cannot judge people by their outside appearance or social status or by the mistakes they've made in life. Everyone deserves a fighting chance in this life. Thanks so much for reading! Take Care!

    ~Lori~


  • grannyeri gold member
    August 27, 2006
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    Can see why you won a gold in another contest for this poem - very heartfelt and throughtful - makes us think about what we stand for too.

  • -Ink Artist-
    August 27, 2006
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    Thanks so much Legend for the awesome comment on this piece!! It's very much appreciated!! This piece is sincere and written from the heart. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Take Care!!

    ~Lori~


  • Legend silver member
    August 27, 2006
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    A wonderful piece that held me from the opening line till its close.I am not in the least surprised to see that you collected a gold with this one. As to be beaten would have taken something of even more exceptional splendor Good luck in the contest

  • -Ink Artist-
    August 3, 2006
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    Thanks Manic Poet for the comment!! It's greatly appreciated!! Wishing you much success with your contest.

    ~*Lori*~


  • Manic Poet
    August 2, 2006
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    These are very real..
    And it is good that you are making them known somehow.
    Anyhow. Thank you for entering.

  • -Ink Artist-
    July 30, 2006
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    Thanks lonikins for the wonderful comment!! It's very much appreciated. Great contest!! Take Care!!\

    ~*Lori*~


  • NikoAmbiguous
    July 29, 2006
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    Wonderful. Great write. Thanks for entering.


  • -Ink Artist-
    July 25, 2006
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    Thanks so much for your wonderful comment on this piece Grendyl!! It's very much appreciated!!

    ~*Lori*~

  • -Ink Artist-
    July 25, 2006
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    Thanks LilSheep for the lovely gold trophy for this piece!! It's very much appreciated!! I realize "gangster" is a slightly forced rhyme, but trying to find another appropriate rhyme for cancer/dancer/answer wasn't easy!! I'm glad you liked this piece. Great contest!! Take Care!!

    ~*Lori*~


  • Fug-azi
    July 25, 2006
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    Extremely hard hitting .. but truthful poem. Well done on winning gold. Well deserved.


  • hks
    July 24, 2006
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    …the young man wearing colors because he wants to be a gangster

    that didnt ryhm well
    but i lvoed the depth and intensity of this poem.. u got a shot at the gold babey!!! lol

  • -Ink Artist-
    July 20, 2006
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    Thanks so much Closetpoet for the awesome comment and applause for this piece. It's greatly appreciated!! Take Care!!

    ~*Lori*~


  • Closetpoet1971
    July 20, 2006
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    Remarkable!

    Lori,
    This piece is remarkable! It says so much about
    how you feel about the way the world has changed.
    If more people felt this way with as much emotion
    as you have expressed here the world might channge
    a little more for the good!! Absolutely heartfelt!
    Thank you for sharing!

  • -Ink Artist-
    June 28, 2006
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    Thanks so much Tainted for your awesome comment. This piece was originally written to be similar to Gretchen Wilson's Politically Uncorrect, which somewhat explains the ellipsis. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. It's close to my heart.

    Wishing you much luck with your contest!! Take Care!!

    ~*Lori*~


  • Tainted Innocence
    June 27, 2006
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    Wow. What else can I say? This is a really powerful piece. I really like how you wrote it. I'm unsure about all the elipses, but that's really minor. This is really well written---thank you for entering :-)


  • brothaluv
    June 22, 2006
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    i've amazined you by having incredible poetry entered into my contest??? that's interesting...i didn't really have anything to do with that...but thank you anyways...and thank you for your wishes of luck...good luck to you also
    -Anthony

  • -Ink Artist-
    June 22, 2006
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    I'm honored that I was able to amaze you, Brothaluv. You've amazed me too, with all the incredible poetry you've had submitted for this contest! Good luck with your judging! Take Care!

    ~*Lori*~

  • brothaluv
    June 21, 2006
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    yes...a lot of people succeeded in amazing me, truly, and you are one of them...its going to be hard...hmm
    -Anthony

  • -Ink Artist-
    June 21, 2006
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    First, vermouth is a white wine flavored with herbs, a cheap choice of many "wino's".

    In my opinion this piece is amazing because I speak the truth. I do not look past the beauty of someone because of their circumstance or their appearance, as many other people do. I seek out the beauty in everyone and see inside their hearts for the reason they are special. Society groups and seperates us. Society judges us by the way we dress and look, or the professions we chose. We are all human and we all feel. I never judge someone because of the choices or mistakes they've made. I see past all of that to see who they are. Each and every one of us is amazing and can do amazing things if given the opportunity. I hope that one of the gifts bestowed upon me is the ability to write amazing poetry about amazing people.

    Thanks for sponsoring such a fabulous contest and accepting my poem!! Wishing you great luck with the judging because you truly do have a lot of amazing entries!!

    ~*Lori*~
    Edited on Jun 21, 9:08 because ''.

  • brothaluv
    June 20, 2006
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    "vermouth" whats that?

    i've told a lot of other people why their peices are amazing...........but thats probly bad seeing as right after that i ask them why it is....so....why is this poem amazing??? a win or a loss hangs on your answer, there is a lot of competition...really good competition and its going to be an amazingly hard choice....so answer well, and good luck
    -Anthony


  • -Ink Artist-
    May 19, 2006
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    Thanks for the sweet comment!! It's very appreciated!!

    ~*Lori*~


  • peace and love
    May 19, 2006
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    great

    wow this is so great. it has so much meaning

    ~ ** Myia Star ** ~


  • absent-love
    May 19, 2006
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    awsome

    I really like this poem because it has a lot of feeling behind it


  • -Ink Artist-
    May 18, 2006
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    Thanks Twirlgirl!! Glad you liked this write!!

    Much Luv~

    Yo Mama!!


  • May 17, 2006
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    OMG! This poem was so... good! I absolutely loved it! You r so good!!!!
    <3 Kay

  • -Ink Artist-
    May 17, 2006
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    Thanks big time Lisa!! I just love Felony's contests cuz he makes me think hard before I start to write! And he gives me gold trophies!! This piece was even longer but I figured I better just stop! Thanks for the applause and reading it!!

    ~*Lori*~
    Edited on May 17, 3:14 p.m. because ''.

  • Lady H
    May 17, 2006
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    Amazing

    Holy shit, this gave me chills when I read it. This just reminded me what an awesome person you are! I don't even know what to say.

  • -Ink Artist-
    May 17, 2006
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    Thanks mzblonde for the lovely comment!! I really do appreciate it!! I'd love any feedback on my poetry. I really admire your work, too. You have great talent!! I'm looking for an AP family so if you're in need of a sister, let me know!!

    ~*Lori*~


  • mzblondemoments
    May 17, 2006
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    Remarkable

    You are truly an amazing writer. I am now your biggest fan!
    This is really an exceptional piece. You have remarkable talent and I look forward to reading many more of your works.


  • absent-love
    May 17, 2006
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    wow amazing

    wow

  • -Ink Artist-
    May 13, 2006
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    Thanks for commenting again Felony!! Not one of my better flows, but it is what I stand up for!! Glad everything went well at the funeral. Let me know how the party went!!

    Lotsa Luv~

    ~*Lori*~


  • Felony 143
    May 12, 2006
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    Damn...talk about a CRAZY funeral...His brother n my brother n all are having a SUPER R.I.P. party tonight. I dont know if I wanna go.. Blah. BUT back to this flow...Baby again..glad someone actually read the rules! (others just have pointed out one or two things) ... I think...no I KNOW you did a wonderful job!! Now ya better watch out for Angel Songs entry! I think she's gonna come up with some good shit! (cat fight! LOL)
    ~ Felony

  • -Ink Artist-
    May 12, 2006
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    Thanks Felony! I hope you know my hearts with you and your family today. I know it's gonna be a rough one.

    Much Luv My Friend~

    ~*Lori*~

  • Felony 143
    May 12, 2006
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    JESUS...about time someone reads the rules!! Well I think you out did yourself again!!!! I am in a hurry (ya know funeral n all) So I'll comment again on it later...trust me this one is going towards the winner's bracket! ~ Felony

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