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I sang myself a soft goodbye

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In fields of lemon-lillied lies
I laid bewitched by sullen skies
I dreamt a dream of flowers
that knew how to never die...
...and sang myself a soft goodbye
myself a soft goodbye


   The daring streaks of daylight
stun like bullets through the leaves
        Awaking tiny eyelids
from the land the dreaming weaves
   But upsy-daisies spring alive
and morning dewdrops do revive
  the faerie laughter put on hold
         the stories; started,
                left untold
  I sing a made-up faerie song
       and snack on berries
               all day long
        I fly through bushes
              big and small
            And toadstools,
    I'll have bounced them all
          The wind will wisp
             my yellow hair
        The twigs will scratch
             but I won't care
   And then if ever people came
          I'd switch my shape
        and change my name
  and seem a simple yellow bird
                 a beauty,
            just a bit absurd
           Then fly to safety,
              switch to me
          and still have time
          to drink some tea
              I sip and slurp
            and bluntly burp
                and listen
       to the birds that chirp
           I watch as clouds
          grow white to pink
        and feel my eyelids
              bite the brink
And when that western sunset sighs
              I lay me down
           and close my eyes 
 And in the dusk of latent glows 
      I bleed into a yellow rose
           So when you sleep
          you'll dream of me,
     inviting you to be with me
in worlds your world can't dream to be
            until you
think
                eternally



In fields of lemon-lillied lies
you slept bewitched by sullen skies
and dreamt a dream of flowers
that knew how to never die...
...then sang yourself a soft goodbye
goodbye to things that die


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Written May 12th, 2006

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  • scorpio rising
    October 15, 2006
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    This was really good
    Great depth
    Filled with such passion

    A Soft Goodbye!

    Yeah I like that
    A graceful beauty to it

    Great Write

    Keep then comin!!



  • Khameleon
    October 11, 2006
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    amazing, this write is gorgeous, the love just blooms when reading this beautiful poem, this is a good work done!!

    The daring streaks of daylight
    stun like bullets through the leaves
    Awaking tiny eyelids
    from the land the dreaming weaves

    very well expressed, this is an insane intelligent write
    well done, keep writing!
    Edited on Oct 11, 4:03 because 'type'.


  • Nature Song silver member
    October 4, 2006
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    Musical flow with the imagery. So well captured here. Nice job. Thanks for sharing a lovey poem such as this. Congrad's on your book as well. Very nice home page. My book comes out in three weeks! ~Sie


  • stephanie sunshine
    August 21, 2006
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    lyrical. melodic. like a lullabye. enjoyed.

  • HeavensChild
    June 21, 2006
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    Good to go.....keep it up

  • honeybe
    May 26, 2006
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    lol got ya!


  • Artificially Yours
    May 18, 2006
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    This was really well written. It flowed perfectly and I loved where it said "Then sang yourself a soft goodbye goodbye to things that die." it's a really beautiful piece.


  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    May 17, 2006
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    the poem, i wrote it before and lost it.

  • honeybe
    May 17, 2006
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    whom are you tring to reacue, yourself or someone else? later Honeybe

  • coolpoet
    May 17, 2006
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    wonderful

    what an awesome job!thanks for sharing this poem with us.

  • hazydreams
    May 17, 2006
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    Very Beautiful

    Beautiful written love the poem and how the words flowed. Very awsome read. Best of wishes to you and all you do.


  • Hulali
    May 17, 2006
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    I am impressed. Ususally rhyming poetry is not my thing because it seems that there is at least one (and usually more) places where the poet is forcing rhymes, and not saying exactly what is meant. Not so here, your rhymes are effortless. Nice imagery, too.


  • Billythekid
    May 17, 2006
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    I agree with everyone else. This is stunning. Are you a lyricist, cus this would make an excellent song.
    -Billy the Kid-


  • real irish rose
    May 17, 2006
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    This is such a pretty little poem...I will be reading this to my daughter later...I think this one she will enjoy !!!
    Well written and indeed a pleasure to read xxx


  • Project-Mayhem
    May 17, 2006
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    Beautiful

    Wow!
    This poem is amazing,
    Well done!
    You are very talented.
    xo


  • blueyez
    May 17, 2006
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    One of the sweetest and most fun writes ever. What a wonderful escape you painted. I simply love it! I will book mark it so I can easily find it again! Thank you so much for sharing your talent and such an uplifting, lovely write.


  • bedazzled
    May 17, 2006
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    Gorgeous!

    I love it! It's so cute and beautifully written and just 100% totally GORGEOUS!!!


  • Anthony-
    May 17, 2006
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    I really think that this is brilliant. Why on earth do we hide our brilliance? Sometimes I long for more than words to share whatever this life is. Tony.


  • MistyAngel
    May 17, 2006
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    WONDERFUL I can put myself there each time I read this, thank you


  • stompsalot
    May 17, 2006
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    Absolutely beautifully penned! I so adore your talent! Reminds me of things in "make believe." Love it! Love it!
    Blessings and *stomps


  • InkedVein
    May 15, 2006
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    This is an amazing piece. The rhythm blends effortlessly, and the words take the reader into a competely different world- one that is hard to leave. Three thumbs up!

  • marrow
    May 14, 2006
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    Greg, you're awesome. I try to think of what comes to mind when thinking of your style and how to describe it, and I think the one I'm sticking with for the moment is "whimsical." You have a lot of whit and clever phrases, and it really paints great images.

    Justin


  • Blind-Ambition
    May 12, 2006
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    Great alliteration and rhythm. I love the switch from "I" to "you," it really adds depth to the poem. Amazing imagrey as always. I always enjoy reading about your fantasy world.

  • GameGodess
    May 12, 2006
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    The imagery in this poem is absolutely gorgeous. I am stunned!!! Great write.
    *GameGodess

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