Well the deal is all but finished and done
turn my back on 15 years of life,i'll miss everyone
To start over in a new place where we are strangers
sharks,alligators,snakes,spiders,all kinds of dangers
We are way out In the damn middle of nowhere
is this what you really want,are you double sure
A different way of life,around a different kind of people
welfare checks,food stamps pays for rent and food on their tables
I am not here to take care of anyone but my own
we don't loan money,cars, or have people use the phone
They all can have the world if they would at least try
get a job and they can have anything they want to buy
My trust and faith in you can be described as strong
please don't keep us here if it turns out to be wrong
Is this what you really want,are you double sure
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we are moving to the country,no wait,i think we passed the country already,thats how far out we are
Written May 11th, 2006
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Very well written, the descriptions are strong. I know where this is coming from, as I can almost hear my mother's voice saying the last line as I left, in the middle of the night, to fly to England to live for 18 months. You caught the emotions very well. Nice job.
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i hope every thing works out for you and ur family in ur new home. I will pray that you guys learn to consider it a home not just call it a home
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thank you very much for reading this ,it is written for someone who i love,it is her choice,i just want her to be double sure that this what she wants,once again thank you for reading this...rod
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I really like this, nice job. The rhyming wasn't overdone and you did an excellent job conveying the meanings... Plus, I liked the title.
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thank you very kindly for the comment,we are going from charlotte,nc to the florida swamps,BIG change i can tell you,thanks again....rod -
Thank you for sharing yourself, in your work. I really liked this piece, and commend you on it. where ever you go there you are! You will be in good company,> Good Luck!
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thank you for the comment,this one just came to me and it does need to be polished up a little i know,am going from charlotte,nc to swamps of florida,it is a culture shock to us all,thanks again...rod -
now you are talking about where i want to live. you have written this very well. the only thing i might do is add punctuation where it is needed. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie
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A very compelling poem. It reminds me of when I move somewhere new, there's always that nagging doubt that it isn't going to work out right but eventually does in the end. -
Loved it
Starting a new, big place to be in...you illustrated it so well. Thanks for sharing...
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