At night, when rain soaks the earth
Permeating the air with aroma
the zephyr so pleasant
wisps of clouds soar into the gray
earth – a lush expanse of emerald green
sparkling crystals splash rhythmically
on to the frozen earth
water-plants voyage through the vibrant seas
hazy memories hold you
in a tidal wave of emotions
Waters glisten like crystal
In the deep , probing eyes of a girl
On the shore of the deep,
We sit silhouetted again in
That distant childhood night
To set sail the paper boats
Those blissful bells of laughter
Chime within the memories
Crescent of moon glowing gently
Under the canopy of stars
A newly opened flower moist
With raindrops
Shimmering on its petals
Emanating eternal love & life.
Author notes
dedicated to my lovely sister...
Written May 11th, 2006
A contest entry
- My second contest by sad1976.
400 points, ended May 18, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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amazingly awesome
Apurva , you have always had this incredible way with words , but with this piece you have simply outshone yourself- each and every line is so pictorial -I have enjoyed t5his a whole bunch
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5 Stars *****
My applause box is getting empty
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now.. i didnt know that i have ONE more sister to cope with... but then its alright, i can manage two rakhis and no mithais
You selectiong of words is excellent .. you seem to be simply brilliant is personal, emotional, and poems concerning about love...purely tranquil write... I am impressed again
take cares and have anice time my dear friend... just keep it up... your humble little friend....
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.... ... - vic ( who else? )
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Amazing write. Very well done. Pure love radiates from this poem. Great tribute to your sister. Thank you for sharing. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Good job. Jeannie D
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WOW.....AMAZING!!! this is so beautiful....great imagery!you have ended it so wonderfully well....simple great.loved:
A newly opened flower moist
With raindrops
Shimmering on its petals
Emanating eternal love & life.
~Ana. -
Gentle and rich. However - please I am not being mean, in just a few places a comma or two would have made the poem go a little more smoother to me. I could be wrong, my humble opinion. But it was enjoyable - not in the sense of a mere tidbit, but something deep and satisfying. Lovely piece.
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Wonderfully written
So full of vivid imagination and vibrance of colors that make the words jump right off the page and into my brain!!! -
Beautiful, emotional
...hazy memories hold you in a tidal wave of emotions, such a rich display of emotions and meaning in this beautiful selection -
Lovely!!!
This is a loving and lovely tribute to the love you share with your sister, Apurva. The imagery is like a gentle breeze caressing the readers very soul, touching the core of ones being, softly whispering the sweet love you hold in your tender heart. An amazing write from your pen.
Good luck in the contest.
Love and blessings from Coimbatore - Uncle Joel -
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Great poem,thanks for entering and good luck.
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Memoir by Apurva's poem gives us lively natural effect and shows the highest imagination forceful to the reader about the poem.
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