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Your heart

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She shares your name
But you tell me I Have Your Heart

She shares your life
But you tell me I Have Your Heart

She shares your children
But you tell me I Have Your Heart

She shares your bed
But you tell me I Have Your Heart

I don’t think that having just your heart is enough for me
You see, I’m not sure you have one……


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Written May 10th, 2006

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  • Bitter Irony
    December 20, 2007

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    Excellent last line. I like the repetition in this poem: see if you can find something more specific than "life" for the second stanza, as it's harder for the reader to visualize than, say, children or the marriage bed.

    Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!

    ~Bitter Irony

  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 6, 2006
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    Thank you for your kind words Rose..I am sure it was not easy for you. I am so sorry that you went through this..You are an incredible woman..remember that...Blessings and much love

    Soulful Woman

  • Rose Patrick
    August 6, 2006
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    I know the pain that yoe are felling my friend . but for me it was my husband who had found another love. but that in no way lessen the pain that you feel. I think that you word here were right on track. I think t6hat you did a really grand write.
  • June-bug
    July 18, 2006
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    excellent

    This comment may sound a little cruel but it not meant to be, I hope you are not writing this from the point that you are the other woman, I was once the one who shared his name, kids, and bed, but someone else took his heart, and now she has it all, so if that is what you want hang in there, more than likely you'll get it, but just put yourself in her shoes and think what it would be like cause you wouldn't like that position either. Nice write.

  • ShakespearesLady
    July 18, 2006
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    very nice are you the other woman in a relationship cuz you have created their anthem
    cool write
  • Priscilla1993
    June 30, 2006
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    WOW this is a very wonderful poem!!!!!!Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece!Keep up the great work. I love the backround for this poem.
    God Bless
    ~Priscilla~Hugs and kissies xoxoxo

  • Heavenly Angel
    June 30, 2006
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    Most EXCELLENT!!!! You spoke your mind in this piece and that is a sign of most excellent poetry! I wish you all the best!
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