You give
and so we take
we have taken so much
you are spent by our blinding need
Mother
Author notes
When does the child finally feel compelled to give?
Written May 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I think you did nicely with this. It’ is not quite a technical cinquain, but you did a great job of expressing your thoughts, nonetheless. You might want to go back and put what option you chose to write about, though it is obvious. But, rules are rules.
~ John
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As per your author's comment, some never feel compelled to give. I enjoyed this very much, and there is so much truth in it. We have usurped so much from our Mother earth that she will someday raise up and let us know just how angry she is. Perhaps it's already happening. Great job! Patricia
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This is well written, infact a very good attempt by a beginner, but I see a dis continuity inbetwen the lines, maybe that requires more practice to keep up the flow. Its ok, am sure u will improve soon. Good luck
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The way you used both options in this piece was wonderful, and your poem gives out such an important message.
Please make a note in your author comments of which option you chose in order to comply with the rules. -
I like that you've combined both options, and this piece expresses much in its brevity.
However, you must put the option you chose in the author's comment section to be eligible for judging. There's more than enough time to do so.
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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We do need to be reminded that we need to give at least as much as we take. Nice message you have put forth here. Hopefully you will get your option posted soon.~ vj
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This is a great thought-provoking write.. well written out. The nature content in cinquain form.. well put together. Thank you for entering the contest. Please don't forget to add your option # to your author's comments area. Good luck and welcome to AP
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I really like the way you embedded nature and a powerful complaint within this cinquain here very well done!
Please don't forget to put the option number you wrote about in your author's comment it's clearly that it is option 2, but you still need to put that there to be eligible for a trophy 
thank you for taking the time to enter this contest - I wish you the best of luck -
Sooooooo Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a lovely cinquain you have written in regards to mother nature. Please remember to list your option number in the author's comment box. The wonderful thing about this form is how it says so much in so few words. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Welcome to All Poetry and enjoy many happy hours on this site. Joyce
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Very nice approach to both options. Be sure to state your options in your author's notes so you are in compliance with the contest rules.
It is a vivid short write that gives me a message I can take with me after reading. Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry
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Not bad at all. You did a nice job and to me this is giving the message that we take nature and all around it for granted, even if this was not what you were trying to say, it was how it come across in my eyes. Well done on this write, Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.
You need to put what options you have wrote about in your comments.
WELCOME TO THE AP SITE
Dawn -
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