Your last hopeful hug
and wave will wrap me warm,
go now…
as I spend the seconds,
minutes,
hours,
days,
months
or even years...
c
a
s
c
a
d
i
n
g
watching the rain,
its ripples
in a puddle of sadness.
I will count
the summers of gloom
the springs of tears
the snowflakes of bitterness
the sunsets of darkness
the shadows of memories
as they lengthen and
shorten...
in the absence of your sunlight.
I will watch waves
as they come towards the shore,
breaking,
breaking my heart,
as I see your vision
in very drop of water
splashing against my skin,
kissing,
then leaving
like our last kiss.
I wait ......... . . . . . . .
for next wave
to come and caress my skin…
Author notes
Written May 10th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Help Me Say "Goodbye For Now" by Rilly.
300 points, ended May 16, 2006, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - November Rounds by CitrineSunrise.
700 points, ended November 12, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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your names not in the AN sorry but i will have to DQ you
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congratulations on the trophies. This is a beautiful write. I love the graphic you used to illustrate your writing. Thank you for the entry.
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I loved the message and the formatting. The stanza dealing with "the absence of your sunlight" was particularly moving. This is so gentle and loving and filled with emotion. I can't wait to see what you write in the next round. Peace, Liz
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masterpiece
The photo is effective.
This poem is so charged with heavy emotion...it almost brought tears to my eyes. Your structure is excellent and so appropriate to the theme. The alliteration is absolutely wonderful and very effective when read aloud. Well done. Very artistic. -
Thanks Tessa, glad you liked it!
Lencio -
Thanks Joy, I think you get a dream everytime I write something unusual lol!!!
Thanks for checking this one, and knowing that you have checked it, and commented I feel, the mission is accomplished!
Love and light,
Lencio -
Thanks Emily, now are the two of you AP twins or something? Glad that you both liked what I wrote in my totally new style!
Lencio -
Thanks April, I am glad you like this write. I have changed my style totally for this write. I think this is what readers look at now a days.
Have a great day and all the best to your contest.
Lencio -
crystaldust 10-05-06 16:40
You have made a wonderful poem here, Lencio, in the shape and with the feel of a wave. It is very beautiful and has a sense of water gently rising to a crest and falling in keeping with the emotions. I love this poem, my friend. Am sending an applause and wishes for a trophy for you. blessings and peace, Joy -
Stunning
I loved this...The style you used was perfect...Loved it so much...Hugs Tessa -
This was amazing....the imagery was so good, Perfect write here. You have and amazing talent. Great job and best of luck in the contest!!
Emily -
Lovely
Wow, this is so beautiful. I love the way you wrote it, the form, everything. You show me such good imagery, I feel like I'm right there, like I'm the person waiting...wait..am I? Lol. You're an amazing writer, and this form was spectacualar. I loved this. Great job keep it up. And good luck! xxxx, April♥ -
Hi, very beautiful my friend, this has a wonderful feel to it, you could almost feel the surf crashing on the rocks, super write, all the best, you have my applause, hugs Di
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