I look at you with pride
as I curl my fingers over your tiny brown hair.
You replied with the giggles
showing your appreciation on the way I care.
A couple of rub with mine,
your nose turns red and your smile is shown.
I just need let you know
that you’re a heaven’s gift whom I call my own.
Your rosy cheeks would glow
everytime I tickle your hips.
and when I say I love you through a kiss
you feel those sincere words from my lips.
I know that your heart
maybe too young to understand,
yet it is no longer innocent to know me
from the gentle touch of my loving hand.
Author notes
An opportunity to greet every mother a HAPPY MOTHER'S DAY
written May 10, 2006.
I choose to write about the sense of TOUCH.
Written May 10th, 2006
A contest entry
- Senses by silverscent.
300 points, ended May 16, 2006, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Mother's Love For Dad's Too Judged by RedwingSpirit.
425 points, ended October 29, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awe so cute Good Luck In The Contest
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Happy Mothers Day. What a lovely expression here, of your heart overflowing with love and adoration for your child. May all the joys, of this tremendously important role in your life be with you always. Great write!
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What a wonderful loving poem about a child. I have many in my life. They are the sugar part of everything I do. They are always on my mind with great love. What would life be without them?? I can't imagine. All my children are my teachers. I learn so much from them and gladly am loved as I love them. I also love your poem!! Warm Regards..vivela
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i can just picture the baby squirming and giggling at the soft tickle of its mother's fingers. this poem is precious and really depicts the love a mother has for her child.
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This is flattering.
Thank you very much for sharing your time in reading this piece. Again, thank you. -
Wonderful
I nearly feel I have a child I have never had after read this wonderful piece.
Kirk -
Masterblaster, kindly visit my page and send your corrections there. I would love to read your tidy version of the lines you mentioned. Thanks for the review, I really appreciate such gesture. I'll wait....
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Your rosy cheeks would glow
everytime I tickle your hips.
and when I say I love you through a kiss
you feel those sincere words from my lips
what a lovely picture painted here!
so sweet, the love for ones child unlike any other
thanks for sharing his lovely write with us
blessings
jamila -
GR8
Wow this is an insainly great poem! The flow great and the deeper meaning was easy to grasp the content in this piece was so beautiful. i like the meaning in it and the last stanza really has a majior effect on the reader. The poem really grabbed me. I am not going to sugar coat anything. If I find a poem or iece of work stupid I will tell you it is crap-maybe in a less harsh way, but I will tell you and you will know.Also if I like something I will tell you as I have told you here. So no I am not sparing your feelings or"just saying it". It is areally great piece. But as I said before the flow is great and this can be easily overlooked. But not this one, you have written such a pretty poem here, I am almost speechles. lol.Great write. once you begin reading this magnificent work you just cant stop!
Good luck with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your magnificent work. Thank you for sharing this special piece of poetry and special piece of your heart with me!
~Angel~ -
WOW! You linked the sense of touch to a mother's touch! You are really a good poet. This sense would probably have made great erotica.
But I prefer your idea. Keep that ink flowing.
~The Risen Sun -
Hi ,Your great love for your child shows in this poem, but there are a few problems on structure and grammar, it happens to all of us, for example:- might be better ,I curl my fingers in your soft brown hair, then you start new verse, a couple of rub with mine, you need subject ,for example I rub my nose gently on yours,it turns pink , red makes one think you are rubbing too hard lol, if you would like some help to tidy this poem, let me know, the thing I did love about this poem was your feelings, wonderful feelings of a great love for your baby, all the best, hugs Di
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