Hold my hand and...
climb with me, look at the mountain's rare flowers,
look at the awaken green crystal lake surface,
feel this amazing waving smell slightly
coming from the heart of beauty.
Close your eyes and listen...
how whispering grass are sipping morning dew,
soft li'l birds steps on the crystal stone,
butterflies are waiting just for you
to sing their song still unknown.
Wait...
waterfalls murmur is calling your name,
within fresh wavelet you can see your face,
mountain's forget-me-not, beautiful blue frame,
unique warm feelings are here, my heart to embrace.
Touch...
my face and you will find warm tears
coming down from my eyes to bless this life,
lough with me loud, hear echos coming back to us,
you almost could touch invisible fluid stream in the air.
Run with me...
to the end of the glade, to the edge of the stone,
you can see this world from the birds eyes and heart,
just be quiet for a while on their natures throne,
enjoy with me, be unbreaking part of nature's art.
Author notes
This poem is written with combined rhytm and rhyme and no-rhyming verses.
ST: allpoetry.com/Contest/1996501
Written May 10th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Weekend With Ted E Bare by Ted E Bare.
300 points, ended May 20, 2006, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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The single sentences at the beginning of each stanza read like a poem within a poem, but also as an invitation and introduction to the following stanzas. This is a lovely weave of nature and love and there are so many lovely images that I really don’t know which one to pick as my favourite. The voice here is soft and gentle...almost a murmur. The last line “be unbreaking part of nature’s art” ends this poem on such a lovely note...to hold the loved ones hand and run to the end of the world, enjoying the view together. A lovely poem, Sonja – thank you so much for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Nicolette. Within all my poems you can find some written this way. Actualy, this is the nearest to my poetic "stile", all other was a kind of poetic trials.
~Sonja~
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It seems you have a poem within a poem here poet. The words in italics speak to me as well. There is a soothing tone to these words that create a sigh when finished reading. Your rhymes are subtle and make th poem all the more enchanting. Very beautiful visuals painted here as well. Beautiful! I wish you the best in this challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you Renee. This is one of my older poetic work and my real, nature style of poetic form. All good wishes are always welcome to uplift my poetic self esteem.
~Sonja~
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This is breathtaking and I had passed up your entry and honey bears by mistake. I try to do them in order as they were received in the contest. I'm glad I always double check the entries at a minimum in order to prevent huge mistakes. I want to thank you for entering the contest Weekend With Ted E Bare and please forgive me for getting to your entry later than I have planned. I hope applauding this entry will make up for part of that.
Ted E
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Thank you Sam for your kind words and friendly support. Your comments are also like a fresh mountain's air to me.
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Dear Sonja... this is pure, from the heart writing. I loved every line of this amazing write. You have been given a great gift... that you share it with everyone here is our good fortune. This poem is worthy of much recognition. I do hope that it is widely read. I think it is my new favorite by you.
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Thank you Nermin. It was a special honour to me to receive your such a beautiful comment. Now I am breatless.
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ecstaticly beautiful
it is so amazingly beautiful, it is making me cry. so beautiful, i feel the droplets of water, fresh breeze, beautiful cristalline water, mountain green and i want to have it all, unfortunately i am so far away from it. my heart is longing. amazingingly superb write. i went in the picture you painted so vividly and my heart is in there, yearning to be all there. tears rolling -
Thank you AngelicMistress. Magic nature's beaute must be shared. I am glad if you found this poetic picture and emotions worth to share with me.
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EXCELLENT WORK!!!!!
Oh, Dear Sweet, Sonja:
What grace and what beauty is expressed through your words in this piece you have written here......
The imagery, the emotions, the message, clear, understanding and awesome.....
I thank you for sharing with me on this site.....
Be blessed always with love and light.....
As always Your friend,
AngelicMistress
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TRULY BEAUTIFUL DEAR FRIEND
It flows so smoothly and gently in my mind. A very beautiful poem! -
Very beautiful my dear queen.
You always potray the nature wonderfully.
Wish you luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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Sorry, James, not this time. This time Ted E Bare is invited.
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Thanks honey bear. I am ofering fresh air, you are ofering honey
I will check to see what other contest participants has on their plan. I am glad you like mine
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Thank you La. I enjoed to write it as well.
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very good
a wonderfull write an di am sure many will enjoy ti ,good luck in the contest to win ted e for the weekend.. avery good write
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Mum, this is very pretty indeed. I read it to my friend and made her close her eyes as I read, close your eyes and you can see this aswell as feel the words. This is beautiful and a true pleasure to read
Well done with this and thank you for sharing. Love always. Laura
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Hm, weekend With Ted E Bare...I hope that he will understand your poetry and your love for nature. After this verses I can feel mountain's breeze on my face. May I go with you?
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