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Eighteen, Eighteen

 

 

 


She has just turned eighteen today
unleashed upon a quiet world
bringing with her all her stuff
except a word that rhymes with world.

 

We’ll forgive her this oversight
her day has been quite overwhelming-
studying for tests, needing her rest
and being distracted by us here on AP.

 

Eighteen! Eighteen!
Oh, what ever happened to seventeen?
Gone forever into the zipper of time
that she will never fit into again! lol

 

OK, her third favorite activity is sports
after creative painting, and stress-release writing,
so those cake calories she inhales today
will be gone before her thighs become frightening!

 

Never to whine, never to run,
an exemplary model for us inferior folk-
always tolerant and understanding,
always one with the next bad joke! (hehe!)

 

But blonde will be blonde-
be it pink or green,
whether she's coming, or going, or stuck inbetween-
she’s the spirit in us,
she’s the one on the bus
that has arrived at the stop where the sign says ‘Eighteen’!

 

Eighteen! Eighteen!
kind of like a pie with cream,
ice cream with cake, pudding in pie.
Stop, I have sugary tears in my eyes!

 

Eighteen, Eighteen,
live your life before it gets cold-
Ah! If I were only 20 years younger…
never mind, because I’d STILL be too old! lol

 

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, RENI, MY WONDERFUL AP NIECE!

 

Here, have another birthday balloon… let me blow it up… <3<3<3

 

 

 


 



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Written May 9th, 2006

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  • wbiro gold member
    May 21, 2006
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    thanks, Butterfly, glad for your warm and fuzzies! lol now I'll go return the critique favor, oh fellow member...


  • -ButterflyCuts-
    May 21, 2006
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    arw beautiful.
    i am a 14 year old girl.
    and i know when i turn 18 i would be so happy to receive something like this. looking through your poems i chose this because it looked nice. and i am a big fan of dark poetry, but today after a long session of revisio i fancied something a little lighter. th background made me smile straight away and i could see it would be a fun poem.
    i liked the words.. and though it isnt your best poem it was written with love and fun
    when i finished i scrolled down to read the comment of isha.. who loved it. an that made me all warm and fuzzy!
    ha ha.. there you go..
    all my love
    jess.
    fellow member of constructive critiquees..


  • Toni A Christman
    May 10, 2006
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    This is simply adorable. It's been a very long time since I was eighteen, but this definitely brings back memories. I know your niece must be having a very happy birthday!

  • glassangel
    May 10, 2006
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    how cute!


  • Lily of The Valleys
    May 10, 2006
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    wonderful, such an age of freedom and maturity!

    P.S. email e this background? please, lol. Backflip1990@yahoo.com


  • TheGangstress
    May 10, 2006
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    awww this is so cute lol. I have 2 1/2 more years till I turn 18...but I'm in no hurry lol. Good rhyming, I liked it. It seems Reni did too.


  • wbiro gold member
    May 10, 2006
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    lol at your 'vaguely', suseann! (and you know I can relate!) Let me know when yours comes around...!


  • suseann
    May 10, 2006
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    Hallmark will hire you in a New York minute. You create wonderful Birthday poemys! This was so cute! I vaguely recall 18 myself. Awh! to know then,what I forgot now.Still wish I was 18 anyways.~~Suseann

  • wbiro gold member
    May 10, 2006
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    lol, let's see, what was I doing at 23... hmmm... that was a dark period in my life! lol
    Edited on May 10 because ''.


  • Captain Changa
    May 9, 2006
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    Just wait until she's 23. I here once your 23, next thing you know your middle aged havin' one of them crisis things.

  • wbiro gold member
    May 9, 2006
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    Your very welcome- now enjoy being eighteen- you only have 365 days left before you're an old, disgusting, wrinkly 19 year old!
    Edited on May 09, 11:20 p.m. because ''.


  • Ishtar
    May 9, 2006
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    I heart you! :d [[blows a ballon <3<3&l

    You are so sweet!
    I'm not always the one with the next bad joke, believe it or not!

    As always, you managed to bring forth a nice evening laughter that ends the day perfectly!

    Thank you so much, Uncle Wbiro. 's

    Happy Unbirthday to you!

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