Alone;
No one with me.
A sharp pain in my chest.
The wind blows softly while I sit,
Lonely.
Author notes
For the May 2006 New Writers Contest, Option 2 (traditional cinquain)
Written May 9th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a superb cinquain. It’s nice to see that people actually know how to write them still
I think you did a fabulous job with this.
~ John
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Very nicely written, but a little sad. Good luck in the contest. Patricia
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oh.. my such a lovely cinquain.. hanging alone
Good job dear.. Keep it up !
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This is so awesome, i can read it as if i wrote it too. Perfect.
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This is a very beautiful piece. I was left feeling saddened by the end, but it is still a very tranquil poem. I think the more I read this, the more into it I read.
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This is such a sad piece, set in a serene tone. I like your approach to this option, and I think it speaks volume in its brevity.
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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"The wind blows softly while I sit here"... that line is powerful.
Short write, but well written! Good form, too.
Nice job!
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A sad and well expressed write you have here. It is a great cinquian example.. thank you for entering the contest and following the rules. Best of luck to you and welcome to AP
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This poem has a very sad feel to it
you did a nice job with the syllable count though. I hope things will get better for you soon if this reflects the way you're currently feeling 
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WELCOME TO THE AP SITE
You did a good job on this. Powerful and strong for the reader. Good luck in the contest. Thankyou for entering
Dawn -
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Very nicely done. The lonely feeling is intense. Powerful short write and perfect syllable count as well.
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry
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Lovely Work!!!!!
Ken, This is a lovely cinquain that you have penned here and even in its sadness it has an aura about it. Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Welcome to All Poetry
and enjoy many happy hours on this great site. Joyce
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I liked this a lot- I even felt kind of lonely as I was reading this. Very effective! Best wishes in teh contest1~vj
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