drowned wednesday, just last week,
and had to hide the body.
back into the rusack.
a clean cut to the neck, to the rhythmic rise and fall
a day of new people,
slow our breathing and crane our necks
the screams died away
sudden silence
voices of villagers
terror and relief
should be grateful
blisters, red, on hands
a day of new people
sudden silence
(c) jsakal 2006
Author notes
*Daa-daa poetry is a type of poetry that involves taking lines or phrases from books, magazines, etc, and arranging them to make a poem. Every line of this poem was found in a book in the fourth grade classroom I work in.
Written May 9th, 2006
A contest entry
- Anything and everything by Fitz1901.
750 points, ended July 22, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Whatever..just make it good. [astonish me] by borrowing.moonlight.
1000 points, ended June 30, 2008, 160 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I had to write this type of poetry for class last year.unfortunately I had to create it from Eli Wiesel's Night so it was very deppresing.
Personally I like yours better. Its so deep and open to interpretation. a very awesome piece of poetry.
Thanks for entering
PS.
remember promote gun control use both hands -
I have done that before.. It has been years though..
And Now I do it with music.. with different songs..
I make Poetry into the lyrics the way I want..
It was an Honor to run for your contest..
Your friend in Poetry... JackReed3...
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I think this is a creative piece.. you put those lines together well. Interesting and thought-provoking in the best ways. Thank you for sharing your words and talent with us all. Keep writing...
welcome to allpoetry
~Kristy
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