While walking
I espied
the melding senses and felt the
beauty
as I --
viewed some melody propel
from the poised finical beak
of a swollen red robin-
well-nigh saw the colored waves
timbre launched in sparkling air-
audienced a frolicked dance
the vortex of laughing leaves
indulged by some quick spring wind
swirling in frantic circle
sun-flitt’ring fairy’s ballet-
as tasting bright and yellow stars
amidst an em’rald carpet,
my eye was fed delicious sight
by the humbled dandelion
during nature’s promenade-
smelled the perfume of the sun-
musing for His own appeal
given for our fellowship
the loving fragrance through His earth
hyssop fresh from Yahweh’s eyes.
Author notes
SPACES
Written March 8th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Velocity and Worship by vox et praeterea nihil.
333 points, ended March 19, 2003, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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magnificent imagery.......
I've only been writing poetry for a few months, so I don't know a lot about form poetry yet, but I am learning so much by reading more poetry every day. Your work is some of the best I have read, and I've read hundreds in the few months I have been on this site. I completely agree with your comments about critique on your homepage. I greatly appreciate anyone that takes the time to help my own work to shine that much brighter. I plan on reading much more of your poetry. I've only read a few of them so far.
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I'm humbly and delightfuly thankful for the read and comment on one of my favorites
and that you are wanting to read more.It sounds as if you are hungry for your work to make a difference.
I'll be happy to critique on Level 1 or Level 2. I'm privileged to have your trust.
Merci.....and blessings your way.
Warmly, CookieZeal/Di
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this is absolutely gorgeous. just amazing talent. and i found in this work such a spiritual feeling. almost as if God has painted these wonderful landscapes for His own delight and we are merely privledged to witness. beautiful images.
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i don't know what hyssop is, but i don't think that really matters here. i get the gist, and this is a gorgeous poem. "viewed some melody propel" is a great bit of descriptive action. that's what poetry's about.
also, it's great just seeing these different takes on two words i pulled out of thin air when i realized i ought to put up a contest... it'd been a while. really fascinating and original interpretation of ideas. thanks so much. -
kewl poem really good
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I like the abstraction in this piece. A good piece that you have written here, it flows well.
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Interesting references to God. I like it. --STP
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