When I'm with you I think I know what's going on
I feel comfortable, secure, like I've been here before
Then disinteresting, like watching grass grow on the lawn
We interview each other about life, philosophy, and more
I learn and hear and sometimes actually listen
But I feel so unexcited, which has seldom been the case
Usually I want all to know and hear and watch me glisten
with pure joy and bliss, but looking into your face
None of that is present, it feels inevitably doomed
and though I thought it'd be easy, I guess I'm not so sure
I can't bear the thought of hurting you with what I've assumed
But I can't find my way around that as you continue to lure
So where should I stop in what you will eventually call
"leading you on?" I can read what you want or so I'd like to think
I don't even know if what I'm saying is true yet at all
but ever so slowly, your hope in me, my hope in us, continues to sink
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Written May 9th, 2006
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So where should I stop in what you will eventually call
"leading you on?" I can read what you want or so I'd like to think
I don't even know if what I'm saying is true yet at all
but ever so slowly, your hope in me, my hope in us, continues to sink
Very senstitively worded with true and internal journey of your muse here..A great honest picture... -
sorry.. i ment to critique so I will now.. the poem is okay the last stanza is more the beauty of the poem. I like the way you combined everything into the word sink.. its interesting the way you set the poem up I think you need more to it.
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Not really looking for relational advice, more for poetry advice buddy.
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Never expect a relationship to work that way you wont be disappointed. Just surprised and happy if it works.
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Sad, and full of dread, but exposes some rvery real emotions in a sinking relationship,,so I believe that you captured it really well in this piece. Many will be able to relate to your words.
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