Endless stars crown the night sky,
Dimmed only by the moon,
Which bathes us in soft white light
As we sit here together.
High up on the hillside
Looking down across the valley,
Where the lights from tiny towns
Reflect the glittering stars.
And from the other side
The dark mountains gaze back,
Reminding us
That when we have moved on
From this peaceful night,
And the joy of being together in springtime,
They will remain
To brave the cold of winter
Alone.
Author notes
I was to write a Chinese poem using the words "night", "mountain" and "winter"...
Written May 8th, 2006
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"From this peaceful night,
And the joy of being together in springtime,
They will remain
To brave the cold of winter
Alone." great poem, its very well written and flows well, good job!!!
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I like it, but it's rather... lacking punctuation. I think it actually detracts from the effectiveness of the poem, because it makes it harder to read. Maybe it's just me, but I feel that with another read/edit, it could be much more... natural.
It's very pretty though, and totally works for the chinese poetry thing
~Christy -
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Thats very well done! It flows together eloquently! ^^
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