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Taken from me

Sadness fills my life
as my heart begins to break.
I should have known it couldn't last
this friendship I knew they would take.

My blood will spill again
upon the bathroom floor.
But this time
they will cart me out the front door.

No more sorrow
no more pain.
Make sure they bury me
in the rain.

Author notes

Was written in sadness but then the problem was solved.
Written March 8th, 2003

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  • Son Of Sun
    March 14, 2003
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    An amazing piece, writing poetry is always a great help to fight the pain, sorrows.
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  • siqminded
    March 10, 2003
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    well miss tish, i can certianly hope this isn't anything more than words, because i enjoy your poetry too much to see you hurting. you've been hitting this flow with incredible perscion lately, where did you find the inspiration?


  • Jeremy DeForrest
    March 9, 2003
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    Not exactly a lot of happiness coming from you poetry, eh? Cheer up.. you still got me. *grins* Seriously though, you do have a way of writing dark poetry. I just wish you could somehow find much, much happier times. There is nothing more I wish for you than that. I shall keep you in my prayers every day and every night... as you are already in all of my thoughts daily

  • Stewy
    March 9, 2003
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    this is a dark one..i hope you are doing alright..great read and i hope that you vent all your anger, some times thinks arnt ment to last..but im here if you wanna talk..i liked the poem
    but hope you are doing ok
    Laters
    Derek


  • alone in this world
    March 9, 2003
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    ..aww Tisha! *hugs* this was a very sad write..no one deserves to be heart broken ever..and if i could i would willingly take every ounce of sadness that enters your heart away from you. I LOVE YOU !! great write..although sad.


  • NeptunesMight
    March 8, 2003
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    ohhh very sad brings back memories fromthe funeral i just went to couple weeks back i thought it might just rain when they went outside to do the grave site thingie for my cousin..anyways good write ..jack.. p.s. kiu!


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    March 8, 2003
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    Boy hun
    This is a dark one
    It's good one thing tho brake should be break
    I do that all time mispell lol
    I got up a new one
    Come see me
    Blessings
    Susan~~~~~

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