Darkness.
Cover me up
And consume my being,
Wash over, make my soul as yours:
Complete.
Author notes
Hi, my first day on the site, just churned this poem out for the contest! Let me know what you think! (Oh and obviously, I went for option 2)
Written May 8th, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Nicely written overall given that it is a cinquain. I could tell you liked it.
Thank you for entering and welcome to the site!
Warmly, CookieZeal
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I can't say much about the form of your cinquain since I've never written one, but I enjoyed the message. You did a really nice job on this piece. Patricia
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Technically for syllable count, you did a nice job with this. I think it would be wise for your future attempts to research the cinquain a little more to really nail it. All in all, this was a nicely written piece.
~ John
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First day at the site and you have tried your hand at a form
gorgeous.. Really awesome. Keep it up, keep writing more, we look forward to read..
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Good Job, I love it
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This is an interest cinquain that you have written for the contests. It has a really nice message in it and is written quite well.
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This is a dark and sad piece, but it expresses emotions I'm sure we've all experienced at some point in time. Therefore the reader can connect though this is a short piece - sometimes brevity says so much. Good attempt with this cinquain!
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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Excellent cinquain and cool message-gives a serene feel off. Thanks for a great entry~vj
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I really like how you managed to pull this cinquain off the syllable count is flawless and I also like the subject you wrote about
thank you for entering this contest and I wish you the best of luck
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You've written a great cinquain here..from beginning to end, well done. Thank you for entering the contest and following the rules. Best of luck to you and welcome to AP
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Very nicely done, especially for --churned out-- as you mentioned. Seems your muse was dancing
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry
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For a cinquain you have done really well and for it to be you first one too
Makes it even better 
Good luck to you in the contest
welcome to the AP site
Dawn -
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Sooooooo Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!
You churned out a brilliant cinquain for your first day on the site. I absolutely loved it. Don't forget to list option 2 in your author comments box so that this will be considered in the judging.
Keep the ink flowing and welcome to All Poetry. Enjoy your time spent on this great site. Joyce
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Darkness doesn't make your soul complete.Just dark enough so you can't see the gaps.lol.Great poem
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