Society remains evenly divided,
on when life begins and how it's decided.
Some are pro life, others pro choice,
but the life at stake has no voice.
Responsible behavior would end this debate!
Author notes
We don't have to take a stance if there is no issue!
A contest entry
- Options Contest, Allowing Prewrites by AlternateCandidate.
500 points, ended August 13, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a very interesting take on the issue.
"We don't have to take a stance if there is no issue!"
That definitely has me thinking!
Thank you for your entry and your voice on this topic,
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Um....your poem kind of doesn't fall under any of the options. Although from your use of the word 'life' I assume I would have to treat this as a pro-life poem....help me here and give me what option you are, or I can't judge this....
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I love this! You have reached in, and spoken the very heart of the debate, and how society should respond to it. The one fact that is undebatable, is that responsible behavior would solve the problem all cases where abortion is seen as the solution. At first I was going to say responsibility would solve the problem in many of the cases (ie the obvious ones where abortion is used as a type of birth control, and to avoid consequences of irresponsible behavior- in these cases, abortion is simply unconsciencable);but the clincher in your poem which made me say that responsibility is the key in ALL cases is your line:
"but the life at stake has no voice."
If the situation were viewed from this perspective, responsibile behavior is clear cut and is the answer in all cases.
Very well written poem. I LOVE that you laid out the facts of the situation so clearly, as emotion is almost always what causes conflict that blinds us to the obvious truth.
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If only, it is like wishing there were no war. But of course irrisponsibly isn't the only cause of pregnancy, there are horrible evil people out there in the world who do horrible unforgivable things.
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If you really read the rules, you would have seen that I do not prefer rhyming poetry. I stated that I am not the best judge of rhyming poetry because of my bias, so I don't think that this was the best piece for my contest.
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Tell It Like It Is
Very direct and your opinion is clear. Unfortunately, responsible behavior by each and every member of society could only occur in a perfect world. (My opinion, take it with a grain or a whole shaker of salt.) But bettering our world is a worthy goal. Thank you for the read and best wishes in the competition.
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Thanks for comment and no need to apologize for spelling or omission of words. I am a master of both. Thank you for an intelligent comment regarding a touchy subject!
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Hort sweet and to the Point! i LIKE IT. Socity is out there aruging and dabating without really consider what the child might want. It's a sticky issue and I think it's brave of you to get down out there and say "hey you act responible THink before you SPeak' I love the wording and ryhtimn (sorry bad spelling) in this poem it flows very smoothly.
Good Luck in my contest!
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I like this piece.
Okay I see the point in what you write. You are correct responsible decisions must be made. As for Master Domtos Rose, there are those circumstances in which the only thing that is right is a therapeutic abortion. This is not easy for the person and that is why their privacy must be upheld. This is why medical intervention is necessary. However for those that are seeking abortions for reasons other than yours a little more wisdom should have been exercised before having unprotected sex. It is called birth control, in this modern age it more available and safer. You provide too for those unexpected cases such as rape. Using birth control does not mean the person is sexually active. It is like have a smoke detector in your house for the simple reason things happen beyond our control. I am pro-choice for life but believe that no one has the right to judge in cases in which they do not know the facts. light insight you wrote an interesting piece. -
Thank you for commenting. I wasn't sure it was as direct to the point as you wanted for the contest. I won't be offended if is not what you were looking for. Thanks again!
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good job!
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thank you for the support and the applause!
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I knew it wasn't hardcore, but I thought I leaned further to side of supporting the contest, than I did supporting abortion. Am I going to get the boot?
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Great
Oh, a Diplomatic view, shows a little of both sides.. but that is not quite what was asked for in the rules.. heh..
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excellent poem
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Thank you for a very nice compliment. That's exactly the way I wanted it to read. Thanks again and take care!
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Finally..poppy between the two war fields...a stunning, powerful write...I Have to say i am pro choice...regardless of the religious guilt trip i am force fed by people on here...your write bares no offence and is true! Incredible Intelligence!
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Okayyyy.. well, I stated clearly that I stop to realize others point of view as well.. I never said you or anyone else were an ogre.. and I am sorry that you had to make such a hard decision, but please do not accuse me of saying things that I did not say.. I never put anyone down, I simply stated that I do not believe in abortion, I never have, never will, but I know that there are different circumstances and different views. Again, sorry for your tragedy, and I am sorry that you took offense to my opinion.. but I will not say sorry for believing in saving a babies life.. May God bless you, and I wish you the best of luck in everything.
Amy -
Whispered Devotions, I have just read your comment on this poem. As stated above, I'd be dead if I hadn't had an abortion. So - isn't that stopping a beating heart too? Yet I'm an ogre because I killed the baby I wanted to save my own life. Thanks.
rose
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What about those who, for health reasons, MUST abort? I had to. Does that mean I chose unwisely? If I hadn't aborted, I'd be dead. There ARE two sides to the debate. Don't stereotype those who choose to have abortions, as you don't know the history behind it.
rose
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'I've shortlisted few poems which i feel can win the contest. Now as I stated in my contest page . I wud like you to read tham and tell me ur choices for the winners within 2 days. TY'
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Pretty appropriate. You've addressed an inmportant issue very effectivly .. I enjoyed it.
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This is a beautiful poem. Short and to the point! I liked the last line, "Responsible behavior might end this debate." If ppl would just stop sleeping around maybe we wouldn't have this abortions issue. Thanks for entering this in my contest!
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point taken!! I too am pro choice given that we do not in a perfect world. Thank you for commenting, I value your opinion. Thanks agian!
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Thank for the supportive comments. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. Take care!
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Thank you for taking time to write and share such a heart-felt comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Thanks again!
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This is very true. Abortion is a difficult issue and you have talked about it pretty well. Straightforward and mature opinion.
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That was one of the best comments I have ever read.. I just found out last year that the guy who raped my mother was not my father, so forgive me if I do not believe in abortion after rape.. it is a sad case, becuase I have been through rape,however it is not the baby's fault and since when is murder an acceptable fix for unfourtuante circumstances.. that is what I try to tell people.. I mean is stopping a beating heart not murder? Why does it matter where the human is located at the time its life is taken.. it a home, in car, on a street, or in a womb.. they all have in common a beating heart and working organs they just arent as big and developed as an older persons.. does that mean because someone's little brother of sister has smaller organs and body parts that arent as developed as ours that I can just scrape them out of their surroundings? Anyway I am just going to end my message before I upset someone even more than I might have already.. your comment was thought provoking and so compassionate. I guess I can stop long enough to look over and understand other's point of view also.
As for your poem.. I loved it.. it conveyed so much in such a short amount of lines. Wonderful job pinpointing the innocent baby's feelings and lack of choice here.. ecspecially since you are pro-choice. it took alot fo talent. -
well this has some validity to it for sure but personally I believe in pro-choice and no one should ever impose on another's free will
love and light
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Very well said. I completely agree with ever word you put into this piece. It is quite nicely put together, and I much enjoyed that you put your opinions so nicely into a stanza. The last line really ties it all in.
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Very well said in a perfect world, we are not....if only this could be...how easy it would make things ...in every point of life..all would change with responsibilty behavor...well said..but only if..thanks for sharing
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I think this is so true. What ppl dont understand is everything that it takes to make a human life is already there at conception, the only thing from that point on is time..time to grow. By the time most women find out their pregnant the heart has already been beating for some time. Abortion in fact stops a beating heart. One cannot say it is ok to kill a baby in this case but not in this instance..it is either one or the other. Here in California a woman can have an abortion up to the moment before birth--how bout that??? Sick huh? Well there is nothing that a 9 month old baby in the womb has that a 4 week old does not..except the time. I work in the medical field..ever seen a video of an abortion?? Most ppl would change their minds once they see the nurse put the baby back together to make sure all the parts are out. I think most ppl are ignorant of such things because to be educated on what really happens would mean they would have to be more responsible..as you have stated..and what person wants that right??I thought this was awesome..great job, and food for thought!!--fairmaiden
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A well written piece of poetry,concise yet still covering many pertinent points.This doesn`t lecture it reveals then asks a question.That is clever.That opens up this topic which is open to huge debate on a logical as opposed to emotional point.As I have witnessed the effects of a teenager who had been raped and impregnated and had an abortion it made me re think my previous anti abortion stance.That girl was a child impregnated by a monster and thank the lord the termination took place before 12 weeks.I have to agree,the debate would be lessened by responsible behaviour,sadly the female has had no choice in being impregnated,but still I agree,because the foetus has no voice why should it be negated?You have handled this issue with sensitivity.Well done.
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Thank you for the sincere feedback I felt while reading your comments. This is a topic I feel strongly about and obviously is major debate within society. Thanks again!!
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Although I believe in the freedom of choice in most cases...I do not in this...Only because I know someone personally who uses abortion as her birth control...she has had nine already and will probably have more...I think your poem is wonderful...It conveys both sides and even the unborns voice....How great that you could say so much about the topic with such short words...I so agree so much with your last line...If the woman would be responsible the choice would not be an issue...When it does become one why not adoption? That way the woman is not stuck raising a child she does not want; and a couple who cannot have one will raise it and love it to the best of their ability...Oh I will stop now...Ty though for sharing such a thought provoking piece on this touchy topic...Trina.
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Another great write you really have a way to touch your reader with your words. Two I've read and two I've loved well done and keep up the good work.
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it was a good and well pome
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Wonderfully written and expressed, it says it all even in its brevity. Loved the flow and feel and the thoughts contained are right on target. great write! Keep your pen forever flowing!
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As always, thank you for your encouragement. It means a lot to find me on your favorites list. Thanks again!!!
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I too am Pro choice all the way. That doesn't make any easier to consider the other side. It seems the best answer would be absence of the decision. Unfortunately, there is ideal and then there is reality. Thank you for commenting and for your candor.
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I appreciate the comments and the heads up comma. Grammer has never been a strength of mine. I agree 100%, this poem could just as easily apply to a Bedridden life. thanks again for the feedback!!!
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As always your poems 'hit' every time! You are very adept at choosing your words ... Your poems really reflect your wisdom! Great Job!!!
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As much as I am pro-choice on abortion, I admit that it is sad that the unborn child is normally the one who has to pay because the parents didn't take enough precautions.
You said everything in these five lines.
No argument on either side, just the acknowlegement of both standing groups.
You raise an excellent issue and point.
Brilliant job, keep up the good work.
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good good
A good statement on the debate about abortion. I have recently debated my head out on this issue. I have talked pro and against. But you know what you are absolutely right in the last two lines. What does the life we are talking about have to say. This reminds me of my poem Bedridden Life. It is not about abortion, but about a similar debate. Well said in five lines and good use of rhyme. Just add a comma after the first line. That is a nice ending line. Good choice of issue. Different. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for the entry.
Regards Sam
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