Slit my wrists hope to die
Stick a needle in my eye
Pain hurt is all my life
My life all black
There is no white
No glimmer at the end of my tunnel
Just black
Only black
Darkness my companion
My morbid reality
I only see death
I see no life
Just black
Only back
Slit my wrists hope to die
Stick a needle in my eye
My morbid reality
I see no life
Only death
Darkness my only companion,
Darkness my only companion
Black, only Black
There is no glimmer at the end of my tunnel.
Just black,
Only black
Slit my wrists hope to die
Stick a needle in my eye
I am gone
Out of here
My morbid reality is no more
I am gone.
Author notes
I wrote this a long while ago when I was quite depressed... People that have read it before it went online said they felt it.
Written May 7th, 2006
A contest entry
- Your Very Best #2 (pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
415 points, ended April 18, 2007, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love this poem its so dark and wow full of fright hehe I really liked it and i think you are a great writer keep up the good work and good luck with this contest!! take care!!
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you have turned a little promise-rhyme into a really great poem. greatr write. thanks for entering.
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I really liked this, the rest of your work must be brilliant,
hey, how about you take a look at mine? Great!! -
i like this alot. It has good rythm. Its great. keep it up. i am appluading this cuz i like it. keep it up.
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Wow, if this was written a while ago, your poems now much be incredible! Thanks so much for sharing this! One suggestion for the future is to try and not use the same choice of words too much in a single poem... just a thought, though. Poems seem to get too repetitive if your vocabulary is all the same. But I wouldn't change this one unless you really wanted to. I think it looks great. Keep up the awesome work!
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Life is great! Love you shell!
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Yeah, i did feel it,
cheer up, life isn't all that bad, it gets better, trust me.
love you, shell -
Fucking love it. It's sad how many people understand things like this.
It would make an awesome song.
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