Remembrance of love:
If I was ever able to control,
the wheel of destiny,
I Would protect you from it,
a thousand times over.
I realize now though,
no one can stop the wheel of time.
People die, but you still live in my heart.
And when I die,even though you are not with me.
I smile because your in a better place,
and our love for one another will never die.
I just want you to know, I love you,
even when the flames of hell close around me.
Author notes
...this poem thing was made for my manga tears of blood:Reign in blood.
Written May 6th, 2006
~Resident of box 5/OG
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I love this. Totally in. Great write and thanks for sharing
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This was a wonderful poem..
The emotion and imagery
were both vivid and intense..
Thanks for sharing..
best of luck..
Angel
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I love the ending. It changes the whole perception on the piece. I really liked it. You write with passion and grace. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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well you made the ending rather shocking, so much so that that it changes what i had originally thought was the main theme- love to death and loss, a very daring fragment of thought this
thanks for entering
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I loved the emotion
in this piece it's
very intense and well
crafted!
~Pastel
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Wow, I really enjoyed this write. You have a lot of talent and emotion and your work reflects that. Keep up the fantastic work!
Christine
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Also well written. Very heartfelt. I enjoyed this piece. It was very sweet in a dark melancholy kind of way. Great job. I notice also that you don't have many recent pieces, yet the system says you've logged in quite recently. That's a heck of a case of writer's block. I hope you get back into it again.
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lol ya like i said im not really a good writer in poetry.Little ideas though do appear from time to time are rare. So writers block it is.
~lovelikeblood
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omg this is really touching im guessing you have or about to have someone taken from you... this is sad but yea my friend kory died a year ago and i can really relate to this it is very well writen keep up the good work and i hoope everything is well
~Heather -
thank you for your comment on my poem 'Just Be You' I am so sick and tired of all the poor teenage girls feeling like they have to be anhorexic to be popular. I have been fat since about age eleven and guess what? I was always surrounded by friends. I used to think that you had to be pretty and/or rich to be popular and then I went to high school and found out that real friends could not care less how you look. It is what is on the inside that counts. I may still be big (nearly 300 pounds) but I am happy and I have three beautiful children. I also have a good job with a lot of respect where I most of the time work to hard. But I love my life. Crazy kids, sixteen hour days at work on my feet all day, even my overly jealous husband. At least I know in my heart that if he is that jealous then there really must be something about me that he is worried someone else wants. Thanks again for the comment. I really enjoyed your poem here and I hope to read more by you later.
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thank u xXshakariXx and what ever religion u bleave in good luck.
~lovelikeblood
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This piece is so sad yet beautiful! Your love brings hope and tears to the person that this piece is for. I bet that they wish that the pearly gates of heaven could surround you though...but then again, we must ask if heaven exists. A lot of people believe Hell to be definite in existence, but there are not a lot of "Godly believers". You are an awesome writer and have said a lot, even personally, through this piece. Keep up the great writing and thanks for commenting on " .Apocalypse-Six-Six."! Also, good luck in the contest!
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awesome
Very sweet and sad poem. It was short and to the point. Excellent job, not drawn out and just a great read. Thanks for entering, and best of luck!
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awwww *tears* thats sweet and sad but true I dont know about the hell part but its a good write keep up the good work ur a good writer bye sis!
~Heather aka Ish
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