Today,
As I was walking,
I crushed a midge with my
Newly coloured lips –
The same lips I once kissed you with.
After a pondering second, I concluded,
I was mistaken; I should have kissed
The blood sucking punkie
With passion instead…
Today,
The wind was brisk
Spraying dust into my eyes,
On the wings of death’s head hawk
It spurted burning floods…
But, the dampened; it soon dried,
And my tears were not for you.
Even if the irritation makes
Me squint for a while or more…
Today,
As I was eating
On a shaded wooden bench,
The insect military invaded my meal.
A good swat with a newspaper proved
Insignificant - just as the trampled ant was.
I imagined it was you, as the headlines
Hurtled from above, this time,
You were helpless…
With modesty dear,
Let me apologise for my bitterness.
See, it is only my mood for
Today…
Author notes
This is supposed to be depressing, but then again it's also about being upset by the one you thought loved you....so I guess it fits both in a weird way. Hope you like it.
Written May 5th, 2006
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That's it, that's how human mood is, bad mood can make you feel bad for others,
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I think this really did captured the mood of a very bad day, and i'm sure we can all relate to it in some way, well done
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An interesting poem, it doesn't have any rhyme scheme (which I am a big fan of) but the structure is nice -
woaw ! a really great write ! thanks a lot for your entry and best wishes in the contest !
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haha! i love it! sometimes when things are bad they just suck, and sometimes when you collapse on the couch and look back at your day (or your life) you just want to laugh. cause what else is there to do? your poem made me feel like that.
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I like this! You really managed to capture the feeling of a day when you're in a really bad mood and nothing goes right and like that wasn't enough, bad memories haunt you as well. Good structure too. I like how you begin every stanza with the same word. OH, and the last stanza is brilliant. Great job!
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Really really well written. I enjoyed it. You managed to not go over the top and still the emotion comes across. I don't think I'm making sense. All in all, very well done.
Leah
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