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I Art Your Sinner

I art Pride
When you walk down the street
Holding my hand,
Leaning your head on my shoulder.

I art Avrice
When you kiss me
I crave for more, kissing harder,
Drawing blood from your lips.

I art Envy
When I see you even smile at another,
I silently curse the fiend,
For robbing from me what is mine alone.

I art Wrath
When you decline to see me
Beacuse you're having a busy day at work
Or because your having guests at home.

I art Lust
When I see that naughty spark in your eye
As you will me into your bedroom
And we make love all night.

I art Gluttony
When we're on the phone
And I cant get enough of your sweet chatter
And coax you to speak more.

I art Sloth
When I wake up in the morning
And find you asleep in my arms,
I could spend years just looking at you.

I art your sinner
And I dont mind burning in hell for it.

Author notes

two of my personal prewrites for your amusement.
allpoetry.com/Poem/1301621
allpoetry.com/Poem/1863776
Written May 5th, 2006

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  • Angelflower
    April 2, 2008
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    Oh wow.. this was really really good.. not only was it sweet, but the image that you created with your words was really good.. I really enjoyed this piece..
    Great write and Good luck..
    Peace to you, Jetleena

    Oh, You forgot to put in what you would like to be.


    • bubbasamuel
      April 9, 2008
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      hey thanks for the honourable mention...i am glad you liked this. oh i wanted to be lover thought i had mentioned that in author's notes...anyway...it was great putting this up in your contest. oh and i am really sorry for the late reply...had been out of town for a few days and didnt have acces to the internet...thanks again..looking forward to more contets from u.. luv bubbasamuel


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    This is pretty maniacal... but it's cool, like the seven deadly sins, got some weird obsession with them


  • missmadimills
    August 21, 2007
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    amazing

    beyond words! this is great, love the dark..


  • BeautifulNitemare
    August 21, 2007
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    omg! this is so great! just what i was looking for. You're a finalist!


  • Ninth-Poet
    December 16, 2006

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    intringulingly interesting

    7 deadly sins. I thinks give a glorification status to these religious cardinal sins.

    -Keep the ink flowing!
    and good luck in the contest!

    -Solus McKnight


  • PoeticSpirit79
    August 25, 2006
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    LOL... Loved it!! Good luck in the contest!! I really liked the last line... slick!


  • skyviewexpress
    August 20, 2006
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    damn...Nice poem! I loved how you not only wrote about 1 sin but aall 7 sins, and how you related ALL the sins to the same topic! Nice job, very well done and smooth! Just the right length! Not really short or pain stakingly long! lol well I just cant get over your last line!

    I art your sinner
    And I dont mind burning in hell for it.

    damn its good! Well you had a good idea, you made it a good poem, and i hope you have good luck in the contest! Thank you for entering!

    ~NATASHA~


  • Reflections Lived
    May 5, 2006
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    o0o0o0! that last line! applaud applaud applaud!!!!!!!! awsome! very powerful write! really took my breath away and made me want to keep reading! you are BRUTUALLY honest and i LOVE it! awsome job with this! good luck*kat~~~


  • twiztidXxXbeauty
    May 5, 2006
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    this is sweet and kool,good job

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