I’ve dreamed of you.
Of us
Breathing in glorious drops
Of pure, unified love.
(Drowning in each other
With interlacing fingers,
Warm embraces, and
Pure and tender kisses)
But just as real life stops
As our bodies fall asleep,
Dreams end.
It is upon waking
That the warmth and tenderness
Of your touch
Are simply memories
As I tremble,
Not in ecstasy,
But in fear.
I cannot afford to dream
Of love I can never have…
Love that is eversoclose
But impossibly far away…
I cannot afford
To create feelings
And build on them
With a you I cannot touch,
A you that is no more real
Than shadows that fade in the shade.
I’ve dreamed of you
But even the most realistic dreams
Are merely creations of the mind.
Author notes
Sometimes I try to convince myself I don't love him
Other times I try to convince myself I do...
Don't ask, it's 1:00 AM.
Written May 5th, 2006
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Well I thought there was gonna be a little more after/ Drowning in each other, like why are you drowning, I mean of course it's obvious it's just I don't know i tend to think to much into things but also /but just as real life stops, I know what you mean but maybe other people might not ya know what im saying? I'm no proffesional so this is just what i thought i liked it don't get me wrong cause if i dont like something i dont even bother with a comment( sometimes) well anyways like i said i am in the same boat i get to descriptive sometimes and other times i dont say enough they tend to look like incomplete or rushed thoughts well peace out , joey
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Like where, joey?
I've been trying to make my poems less wordy because that was one of the things that my College writing professor told me I should work on. She said I was using too many words where less could do the same job. But I'm just curious where you think I should add things and I'll work on working it in keeping everyone happy
lol
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sweetness
yeah i liked it it's just that in some places it seems like there incomplete like there should be a little more wording, but i do the same so i cant really say much anyways well i hope you find your dream lover someday keep on writting , joey -
First of all, your author comments really stand out. You should try to write a poem using that idea. I mean, obviously, this poem was based on that, but I think it'd be cool to see a poem obviously based on being that torn about someone.
I know how this feels, too. Sometimes, I'll have dreams about people that I'm not interested in at all, and it'll make me weird around them, as if I'm afraid I actually feel that way about them. It's a strange feeling, and it's completely irrational, because dreams often mean nothing (I mean, come on, last night, I had a dream that I almost had to fill in for Paris Bennett on American Idol because she got sick, but while I was learning her song, she got better and performed herself...what the heck could that have to do with my life? ) But you can't help wondering if you subconsciously want to be with that person.
Very well expressed, and good luck with this person...don't be scared of the feelings though. If the dreams are really that comforting, maybe these ones ARE actually trying to tell you something (especially since you pluralize them).
kayla*
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