i am just an imbecile
i am just an ape of the mother
i am what you criticize
i am what makes her cry
i cant remember what you have done
with her tears you have begun
bottle them up throw them down
strike them down to the ground
make the world renaissance
rebirth is what made her become
what it now is
a beautiful monstrosity
it was all because of you
the chains have now hooked up to you
go into your secular cellar
make her again what she once was
Satan has molested your mind
and now he rapes your mother
all because of you
Author notes
i hope you like this poem because its the first one i have written on this website.
comment please!
Written May 4th, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Very cutty sark and sobering. I like all the personifications
you make with the use of antagonist and protagonists, while
implicitly suggesting that Mother Nature is such a victim
Great application to this contest!
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Wow! I have to say that you have certainly come to the point! I enjoyed reading this piece, but the darkness is so extreme that it's almost unbearable. The emotion flows like a babbling brook, only without that delightful sound. Excellent piece! I loved it!! Hugs, Patricia
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For the most part, I think you did a good job with this. My only “problem” with it is in the final lines. Per the rules, there is to be no ADULT type entries. Though it is metaphorically being expressed, it still falls within the fine line. You might consider rethinking it. It is not a requirement to do so, merely a suggestion.
~ John
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Hmm.. deep and dark. Good. U have literally brought out the tears of mother nature
Good luck in the contest dear 
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Super powered
We,it seems, do spoil the eco system and it's rationality somewhat, somehow. Strong poem. Also is moving at an ideal momentum. GREAT.
SMILES TO YOU.
rhymer2000
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This is a very dark write, but it really suits the picture you chose to write about. You still need to put in your author comments the option you chose to write about in order to follow the rules properly.
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This is a dark, twisted and powerful interpretation indeed! I like the use of oxymoron in line 12:
a beautiful monstrosity
However, you didn't put the option you chose in your author's comments, which is a requirement for eligibility in this contest. There is still enough time left to add this info.
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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It's like the gavel has hit the desk and the verdict is a clear "guilty" as charged. Powerful poem you have penned here. Thanks for entering the contest.~vj
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What a dark and somehow haunting poem you have written here
as said before, there is indeed a whole lot of sorrow dripping from the words you've used to wield this poem with... some interesting and vivid images you've captured too!
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I don't now what I could say here that hasn't been said already. You have some powerful, dark lines..thoughts written out here. I think you did well writing this out. Don't forget to add your option # to your author's comments for the contest rules. Best of luck to you and welcome to AP
~Kristy -
Very dark!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorrow, I have to agree with my fellow greeters that this is a very dark piece indeed. You took a unique approach to show what has happened to the earth. Mother nature is a driving force on our good earth. Volcanos, tidal waves, earthquakes and such are not man made catastrophies. They are mother nature in action and some actually behold these as her striking back at man for the havoc that he has wreaked upon our great earth. There are many things we don't have control over, but mother nature is not the one being raped as you put it in your poem.
This was very strong and I suggest you put the note in your author comments to be able to have this judged in the contest. All you need to do is put the option that you chose and which picture you took it from. Thank you for sharing and Welcome to All Poetry. Try to look at the good things mother nature still shares with us as well as the bad. I think you will find they tend to balance out in the long run. Best wishes in the contest. 
Joyce
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All are responsible for the entire envrion. Each must contribute maximum good for thr whole to heal. Thank you for the strong reminder to do more. I'm soon mowing.Wearing deet.
Can't be helped. West Nile Vires haunts my Savannah Ga property. Fresh rain in the drain ditch a few yards away.
Mary Aiken Rhymer2000 -
Very dark! As I was reading I found it to be very disturbing. The topic that you have choosen to write about, you have approached in quite a unique way! Well done to you. Good luck in the contest
Welome to the AP site
Dawn -
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This is a very dark and disturbing concept of some of the ills that have befallen Mother Nature. You use a unique approach to the topic that is quite stark.
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry.
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