Nights fringe in sadness,
Days amidst in pain.
Wreck to a point of madness,
Untill the routine drives you insane.
The endless realm,
Of this so-called life.
And the twisted reality,
Of this dream.
A heart been stab from within,
By a thousand knifes,
And love dies to extreme.
A path of choice,
This dream will shatter.
I still hear a distance voice,
Within the path of daggers.
A time of need,
This dream will finally end.
The destiny it feeds,
To a life that is about to begin.
Author notes
I wrote this poem about Robert Jordan 8th book.
Written October 25th, 1998
A contest entry
- Hey! YOU! LOOK HERE! by Random Goldfish.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 12 entries
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holy crap! thats hell good!!!
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what a great write, i really like what you came up with here, it works even if you don't know the book it's written about,best of luck in the contest
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I like the image of stabbed within. Makes me think that is a greater pain then an actual dagger.
Good job here, and thanks for entering
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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I love the image of a "path of daggers" and the way you presented this. That last stanza was amazing, especially the second line... or no, I really can't pick a favourite. Nice job.
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Good poem. Good luck.
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Wonderful rhythm to this piece. Your imagery is nicely done and the choice of metaphor is great. Very well written. Thanks for your entry!
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Thank you very much for reading and commenting on my poem
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The endless realm,
Of this so-called life.
And the twisted reality,
Of this dream.
i liked that above stanza i thought it had great flow
the rest of the poem was also good
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Thank you so very much what you said about my poem.
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Thank you so much.
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Good!
Score:
Subject:3.3
Rhyming:2.0
Flow:2.3
Total:7.6
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Thank you so much for reading my poem
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I like the stab from within part and how the poem kind of shows both sides of the the (coin) pain/sorrow and joy/hope
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Thank you so much for what you said about my poem and thank you for stopping by to read my poem.
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Thank you so much for what you say about my poem and thank you for stopping by to read my poem.
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i like the "Path of daggers" part. it's really a good imagery and really ties in with what you're saying. i also like how the surrounding matches ur poem almost. the knife (s) in this poem really keep the poem going. it's a good poem.
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Great.
I really liked your poem. It flows well and all comes together nicely. Good luck in the contest to you! =) -
Thank you
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Thank you for your comment
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I love the way you've writen this, it speaks to me.
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a really good poem
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Very Good
An inspiring and very well written piece of poetry. I agree with the above comment this really is a great poem. Good luck in the contest. -
Thank you so much that you like poem. It mean much to me that you have veiw my poem brilliant. Again thank-you.
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Brilliant!!
AMAZING!!!! You get a standing ovation for this write. You have created a truly great poem!! It is as entertaining as it is deep. Well done!! =)
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