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World View

There is so much knowledge out there ( in the world )

The masses remain stupid.  

Civilization continues in a very uncivilized manner

as it should, for we are beasts

never to be domesticated or owned

to remain human but wild and free,

tamed only by love,

the universe exists forever.

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its a work in progress
Written May 3rd, 2006

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  • Consciousness
    July 9, 2006
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    thanks for the comment, i appreciate it and enjoy hearing your thoughts. I think mabey it is done, perhaps it shall stay the way it was originally written. thanks.


  • SubXConscious
    July 5, 2006
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    Beautifully put...if it's not finished let me know when it is...I would love to read and comment on the poem when it's completed...as for now it's very well written, great form, and it seems like you definately put thought into it and that's always good. Great job.

    Bethany


  • Consciousness
    May 30, 2006
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    Thank you. I really appreciate that you took the time to read this and your comment. Glad you enjoyed it.


  • Trapped Rage
    May 30, 2006
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    I've always envied those who can take a profound thought and it into a small, but equally profound context. That's what you have done here, and I couldn't agree more. Great job. Its nice to know that there are still people who can see the good and the bad in this world, without losing hope in one or the other.


  • Consciousness
    May 8, 2006
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    Yes, love truly does exist, i know it, ive seen it and ive experienced it. perfection does not, but love is there and true love does not nessecarily have to do will sexual love at all, although sex can definatly be incorporated between lovers. you say you have not seen real love for a long time so you must be implying that you have seen it. not everyone is pretending. remember there are 6 billion some people so even if everyone you have ever met in your entire life seems loveless(which i really hope is not the case), it is still an extremely small sampling of the world, and dont even bother to use tv as a sample haha. i truly hope you see some real love soon, and experience it first hand. i cant say for certain but im sure you actually do know of some love in the world. as for the universe, true forever is a long time, who knows peace be with you always and be open to love.
    Edited on Jul 09, 7:17 p.m. because ''.


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 5, 2006
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    Hi, does love exist any more or just the sexual kind, I have not seen what I call real love given by the human race for a long time, oh the put on a good show of pretending,lol, sorry I am getting cynical, I wonder too if the universe will exist forever? not if man has anything to do with it, all the best, Di

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