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Mother(Acrostic)

Met an angel from heaven above
Old and fat with a peaceful heart;
Together we saw the life
Her touch gave me strength and light.
Elegant and soft her hair flew with the wind
Reaching the stars she held out a string.

I held it in my hand,

Looked at it carefully
Opened the box that carried the string.
Violin started playing a song
Each note made a count
   of
Years that had passed with countless moments
On went the tune that was flawless
Unconscious mind woke up to reality.

MOTHER, I LOVE YOU
is the fact that won't change till eternity.....

Author notes

MOTHER is like an angel sent from above to care, to love, to show the faults and mend them. Mother is everything and I would be no one had it not been for my Angel- My mommy.
Written May 4th, 2006

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 6, 2008

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    There's nothing like that motherly bond, but your line "old & fat" cracked me up, but also puts this poem in such an honest light.

    Great acrostic. Thank you for entering the contest.

    ♥
    whisper


  • seriouswheels731
    January 20, 2008
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    great...

    great poem.. man..great accrostic..


  • raspberry Greeters member
    May 15, 2006
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    A lovely acrostic for your mother. Am sure, she will beall smiles whe nshe reads this. Good job dear, thanks for entering. Good luck in the contest


  • peru
    May 12, 2006
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    Thank you for your time, comment and most of all for the "Blessings".

    --peru


  • peru
    May 12, 2006
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    And thanks for the applaud
    --peru

  • peru
    May 12, 2006
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    Thanks a lot for your comment and no I am not calling my mother an old fat lady as it sounds but it's the way I love her! LOL!

    Thank you again and God bless.

    --peru.

  • Betty Rickard
    May 10, 2006
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    Lovely

    Lovely write..Good luck in the contest.
    Blessings,
    Betty


  • pattyann4500
    May 8, 2006
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    This is a very lovely acrostic. Mothers are very precious and deserve a love like yours for your mother. Thank you for this beautifully-written piece and good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia

    By the way, don't call your mother old and fat. LOL

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