Waking up to the thoughts of you, holding me in your arms
Smiling as the picture of you, i see in my mind
Feeling so hopeless, I wish you knew
The happiness I feel in your presence
The Love I have for you.
I knew it long ago, but didn't say a word,
For I've been let down before,
And i didn't want to take that road, again, alone
I don't like sleeping alone in a cold bed
I wish you were here for your warmth, your passion, and tenderness.
Oh how I love you, but you do not know.
I'm afraid to tell you how i really feel
Tears flow my eyes, Drench my shirt
Baby I Dreamed of You Again.
Author notes
Self Explanatory, but i like knowing nobody knows who im talking about
Written May 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Poetry Form Contest by Lucian Valcor.
300 points, ended May 12, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything by Nam.
900 points, ended August 25, 2007, 97 entries
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What did you think
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awesome write, I can feel how strong your agony is, your very talented... stay strong, an hopefull
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baby girl i am soooo sorry that i have not been online..who did u write this for..its amazing
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i love that pic so much
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THIS JUST THE SWEETEST!!!!!
Anyone would be honored to have this said to them and to have someone like you to care for them.
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if only they knew
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"And i dint want to take that road, again, alone" - "dint" would be "didn't".
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>>Smiling as the picture of you
at the picture of you? Or am I reading this wrong?
>>The happiness I feel with your presence
in your presence, perhaps.
>>And i dint want to take that road, again, alone
very pretty. didn't* of course.
>>I don't like sleeping alone in a cold bed
>>I wish you were here for your warmth, your passion, and tenderness.
>>Oh how I love you, but you do not know.
a beautiful stanza.
>>Tears flow my eyes, Drench my shirt
flow from my eyes.
Overall, very nicely written. Thanks for sharing. -
awesome poem
great descriptions and excellent use of metaphors.
i can feel your emotions in this and I am always excited when someone can make me feel what they are saying.
loved reading this.
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I felt as if somebody's telling me my story only
so much i could relate with your poem here.. such a honest and elegant way to express helplessness in love... Beautiful!!!! 
keep writing and keep spreading your fragrant words :
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thankx
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I don't like sleeping alone in a cold bed
I wish you were here for your warmth, your passion, and tenderness.
Oh how I love you, but you do not know.
I like this part the agony of not being able to tell someone how you feel... bleeds through these lines great job.
poeticanjil -
you have really short lines, and realy long lines, that could simply be made much shorter, and soun dmuch better. in these long lines, i feel that there are certain unnecessary pauses, that take away from the rhyth of the poem, as well as its flow.
but in general, well done.
i like the ending. it made me smile... in a sad kind of way.
tahnk you for enetring our contest
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lovely work great poem and very well done here,, I say good luck in the contest best wishes
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10 000/1
This is an interesting piece of poetry that left me in a sense of speechlessness because it is penned and crafted so differently then what I normally read. I know the poem is self explanatory but could elaborate on the mindset you were in when you wrote your masterful piece of poetry?
=Keep the ink flowing!
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yes it did, and it still seems to be working very well for me.
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things still good?
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so did things work out or no?
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this is a really great poem. i felt like this for the longest time, but when i finally got over my fear of this my life seemed to get progressivly better.
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your so cool
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Awww huh...well- happy tears are ok. Cuz you can smile and feel good!
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Thanks you sooo much James, you put happy tears in my eyes.
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Beautiful!
But it's extraordinary. Because it is in a special place within you- you are able to write about it so beautifully!
It's such a precious poem. Only a wonderful heart could write something so special.
All my love;
-James.
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