Someone close to you passes on into the afterlife
things left undone, unsaid...an untimely event.
Leaving you with just a memory, a single remnant of how life once was
" why were you taken from us, why not me in your place "
Wishing you could change the past, change how everything went between
you and your friend...why couldn't u keep your spirits high
In a slump now, not able to sleep nor eat...not even able to hang onto
life and be happy, wishing for a sign that your lost friend was
In a better place, happy and painfree... their spirit wandering this
world, no home to go to...just wandering, through time hating
those who drove you man, those who drove u to the brink of death.
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Written May 3rd, 2006
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I agree with A K Green! This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read!!!! Keep up the awesome work!!!
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It was a very good poem but I think it would be better without the chat speak. That detrackts from the poem in a big way.
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Wow this is really good. I really like this poem, from the heart. Great!!! I would like to be in your family!
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Yeah that one line " why were you taken from us, why not me in your place " so totally says how i feel about m yfriends death, i so think it hsould be me... but besides the point... this was deep... it was wonderful to read. Keep its ups
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nice poem it is deepand simple too
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Your poem was so deep and yet so simple. You have both acknowledged and enlightened the event.
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This is deep stuff which I can understand, relate to and connect with. A pleasure to read! Just one comment is their a mistake on the final line?
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