It's been a short time and you're not in a race
So don't rush too quickly or let loose of your grace
I'll be here for you when the chips are down
I'll be here for you to pick you up from the ground
I'll be here for you to kiss you good night
I'll be here for you when you lose the fight
I'll be here for you when you need a friend
I'll be here for you and I'll never pretend
I'll hold you with me, when you're feeling sad
I'll hold you with me, till the feelings are glad
I'll hold you with me, When the females bark
I'll hold you with me, And play catch in the dark
I'll hold you with me, If you want me too
I'll hold you with me, Because I love you
I need you in my life, but the decision wont be crushing
I want to avoid strife, and the answer shouldn't be rushing
I want our trust long lasting, and the answer to be perfectly clear
I want you and that's me tripping, but I'm tripping without any fear.
What did you think
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Excellent
Hi again Trot, (after an absence of many months). This is so much better than when it was joined to another piece. Now this stands alone in its own right. Very well done yet again.
George
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wow...im in awe right now. That was really good, it was a nice flow nice story, nice everything! Good good good....now go read my poem!
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This poem was so sweet!
Plus well written and a very good concept.
Really, keep writing.
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Very Good
rush to quick <--- 'to' should be 'too'
answer perfectly <--- 'answer is perfectly'
Great poem. I'll admit, when you threw in that line about "I'll hold you with me, When the females bark" I thought...'woah. This dude is writing a love sonnet to his dog. Do I want to finish this?' I thought that a bestiality poem was highly unlikely though, so I decided to risk it, and now I'm glad I did. Most assuredly one of the better ones I've come across during my wonderings today. -
Humbling (if thats how you spell it...)
OOOOOOO Trevor--- that is such a sweet poem!! I didn't know you had a softside..... That's really nice. I liked how you not only RHYMED....... but you also had repitition..... but you aleady knew that lol. You did such a great job, I have no other choice BUT to give you some applause..... so I will........
The only problem is, that would mean I'd have to humble myself and tell you I thought you did a nice job........ You did, so I can't argue.....
Have an awesome day Trev, and I left you a few comments on MySpace!!
*Debbie*
~Just a Friend~ lol
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