How come when reading poems of your hand,
I think I know you as my friend.
Why does it look as if when you write, you do it for me
telling me your pain an misery.
When reading the lines an in between too,
feels as if it's to me coming straight from you.
When you write about love and wishes,
I would make them come true and feel your kisses.
The misery you describe with beautiful words,
makes me feel so much hurt inside.
Wanna comfort you an kiss away your tears,
wanna hold you close and take away your fears.
This question I have I must ask you...
when you read my poems...do you feel the same too??
Author notes
Written May 3rd, 2006
4. enter your 15th poem here on AP [this is the ONLY OPTION THAT A PREWRITE IS ALLOWED!!!]
In a list
A contest entry
- Partners in crime group please by Partners In Crime.
450 points, ended March 18, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So many poems are touching me when I read them, am I alone in this??
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No you are not alone in this. I think thats a big reason why most of us like this site, we get the chance to understand and be understood. Yes, its about becoming a better poet, but its also very much a social outlet! For me anyways...
This is a sweet reaching out. You must have a good heart.
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This a wonderful poem...well written and easy to read...and I think we all find some truth in what we read that other's have written...some good and some hurtful but needding to be written...Good luck in this contest...
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Two kinds of people, those who keep it in and those who let it out...AP is littered with those who let it out...often without concern for literary worth, lol.
But they do get it out of their system at least. Every now and then however, I run into a poem, or a poet who can express themselves in a way that can even make my jaded heart beat faster. That's why I like to read poetry here, it's like a treasure hunt and finding that gem is worth pouring through a pile of bleeding heart poems.
Not to sound like a snob, for we all like what we like. I've been way to serious...I need to learn a few knock knock jokes.
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forgot these
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thansk so much for taking the time to enter
great write and best of luck
Tasha
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A really good poem will make the reader feel what they are feeling It happens to me all the time when im reading a poem that is sad or happy, i feel it like it is happening to me. Very cool poem good luck in the contest
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I like this And it does feel much as you write of here. Poetry talks to each of us on whichever level we're receptive through.
A good poem, very good
Dee
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No you're not alone in this! When I read poetry who are really sad, strong or loving, I feel it as if it was happening to me. It's quite amazing really - it's like a bond between poets!
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Maybe this question wil never be answered..but that's alright...I have a great fantasy...so not only making my own questions...sometimes my own answers to!!!!!
xxJeannette -
I enjoyed reading this poem and after reading it the ending is actually perfect for it. I hope you got your answer
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Jeannette -
yes much better...still one last thing..."comes" in the first line shouldn't have an s on the end. great job with the editing. i still love this write.
<3 Catherine -
Hy Living Hate,
I have made the changes you suggested......
Think it's better now?
Thnxs again,
XXJeannette -
Well...I like some of your lines indeed....I think I will first send you my poems to reorganise (LOL)
Thanks,
maybe I will edit this-one a bit tomorrow.
xxJeannette -
makes me inside feeling much of the hurts...try...makes me feel so much hurt inside...Why it look es if you write you do it for me...try...Why does it look as if when you write, you do it for me...feels it is for me and coming from you...try...feels as if it's to me coming straight from you.....these are just some suggestions. you don't to use them.
<3 Catherine -
well if you can tell me? I use this spellingcheckmachine.....I am here in the dutch an try to make the best of it...So will I hear from you????
XXJeannette -
very nice write but needs quite a bit of editing. very nice effort. good luck on anything else you write.
<3 Catherine -
loved it!
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a heart broken never mends
i think this poem is very good. keep it up.
beachgurl22 -
do you mean how come when reading palms of your hand? That makes much more sense here. Surely that is what you meant. Good try on it.
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