Mother,
why do you cry?
You stand there so unclean
and it breaks my heart to see you
so sad.
Author notes
option 2.
this is about mother nature... its so sad that mother nature is tormented so much because of polluted air, litter... everything... rain=tears, and she cries an awful lot.
Written May 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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very touching
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Quite passionate for a cinquain. I don't know much about them, and I don't know what the rules are on them, but I like this just the same. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia
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I think for the most part that you did a good job with this. You might want to double-check your sources on what a cinquain is though, and how it is formatted. You can get a better idea of it here: www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html and it will explain what is expect within it.
~ John
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oh dear, so cute... sweet and lovely. Thanks for this entry here, we are glad to have this cinaquin. Good luck to you
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This is a lovely cinquain and i think you have accomplished a hard task by using both the picture and the form together. ou have really pulled this poem off and I enjoyed reading it.
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Fantastic.
I know I'm very new to this site, but to write such a short cinquain with such tremendous feeling is really inspiring and impressive. I absolutely loved it. -
I like that you've incorporated picture 2 into the cinquain option - very creative and effective! This piece speaks volume in its brevity.
Thanks for entering, and welcome to the site.
Best wishes in the contest,
Stacy
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You have written a lovely cinquain here - and even though you took the second option, it also kinda feels as if you wrote it inspired by picture two of first option
A very strong and powerful complaint you have within the few lines here, and I like that very much
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Nicely done! Thank you for participating in the contest! vj
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Powerful write.. and a wonderfully written cinquain. Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts. Best of luck in the contest. Welcome to AP
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Very nice!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love the cinquain, she is sad when she sees all that man has done to destroy the green earth. It's amazing how so few words can be so descriptive. Best wishes in the contest with this entry and welcome to All Poetry. Enjoy many happy hours reading and writing on this great site. Joyce
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Very nicely done. It is as clear as day what you are saying. For such little words it has such a big meaning. Well done. Good luck to you in the contest.
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WELCOME to the AP site
Dawn -
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Nice cinquain. It gives that moment of reflective sorrow and implies much. Good one.
Thank you for following rules, and welcome to the site !
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Very nicely done cinquain. You express volumes in very few words and very simple language. Impressive.
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry
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