Motherhood at it's Finest
For every one who had the pleasure
of exploring the dense, mysterious jungles
of their own backyard, I offer this tribute...
Hoping that one day my own sons will forge their
dreams of what they will become as men
As they climb, build & perhaps fight a little
under the warm & comforting boughs of their
crudely built tree house
And as well for my daughters who will delight under
the bright red, yellow & golden curtains
of their favorite cherry blossom as they weave
garlands of flowers & talk their secret codes
in whispered giggles of what fine sweethearts, wives
and adventurers they will become....
Lest that we forget...of those moments
when we shared in rapture under it's
protective green silken curtains,
concealing the magic of a first kiss...
from an unforgettable love...or how we wrap our
arms around it & cry out bitter tears in regret
for the passing of that same love...
Love, Hope & Dreams....
Both young & old one day will sleep under Earth's
warm blanket & dream endlessly about the stars & what had been
& what had not...
The joys, sorrows both happiness & pain
only one comforting arm lulls us to sleep
Knowing when we wake... there will be the promise of a new day...
For my future children & those coming after us,
I must Hope that they too will have what we
have taken for granted & now do not admit we help
destroy...
And because I must Hope,
I pray not to weep...
Author notes
pls rate my poem
Written May 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I noticed that you must have accidentally posted twice. No worries.
But you will need to figure out which one you want to have remain in the contest, so that you do not fall prey to breaking the rules of only one entry per member. 
Please make sure to choose one, or both may risk the chance of being removed.
~ John
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Oops! It looks like you have posted this twice, so please read my comment on the other post.
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Ah, I see you've fallen vicitm to the "double post".
Well, just a few click of the buttons (as instructed by my compadres) and you'll be outa that trap in no time! 
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You have written something that is definately very appealing for the eyes of the reader
There is a strength radiating throughout the words here that really will keep on lingering within the reader for a while well done on that!
As said before though, I too have to point out that your poem has more than 20 lines (see Rules, n° 7) so maybe you could fiddle a bit with that?
Please also remember to put the option you chose to write about in your author's comment that's very important to be eligible for a trophy
thank you for entering the contest, I really appreciate the effort you've put into this!
Best of luck!
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This shows your unselfish side-concerned about the future for your heirs-wanting them to enjoy the same things you once were able to enjoy. Great job on the picture-although you have yet to post which one-lol
(on a personal note, I would change the & signs to read as and-it keeps your poem classy) -
You have some very beautiful and vivid images written out here.. Pleas edo not forget to add your option # to your author's comments for the contest rules. Thank you for sharing your very lovely words. Best of luck to you and welcome to AP
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Beautiful
I enjoyed your imagery. -
Very well written!!!!!
This is very well written and I hope you can find a way of making it conform to the rules of the contest so that it can be judged. Best wishes in the contest and welcome to All Poetry. Enjoy many happy hours of reading and writing on this great site. Joyce
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Words of beauty flow in each line that you say. A clear image is left clear as day after reading. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
WELCOME to the AP site
Dawn -
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This is a beautiful poem. I do have to repeat the previous suggestion of posting your option in your authors notes and also per rule 5. Entries must be no more than 20 lines in length. So will need to figure out how to redo your line breaks a bit or edit a tad to be in compliance with that rule as well
You have written this in a strong voice, with conviction and confidence and it was a very enjoyable read.
Best of luck in the contest and welcome to AllPoetry. -
'And because I must Hope,
I pray not to weep...'
I found this ending effective -
Hi there!
Very beautiful in content and direction! I love some of your phrases and the way you describe how important it is to
your future generation.
A critical review is invited
I wonder if you could balance the lines a little more
so that it reads more like poetry rather than essay?
The ellipses (series of periods) can be as some repeated punctuation(s) and cartoon the layout of your piece. Why not only use them once to illustrate exasperation rather than
the random list and the intent it gives here?
The ending is good. It summates the body of the poem which I find very important
Please post the number of picture/option in your Author's Comment area to meet with the criteria If you have any questions, please let us know.
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