Motherhood at it's Finest
For every one who had the pleasure
of exploring the dense, mysterious jungles
of their own backyard, I offer this tribute...
Hoping that one day my own sons will forge their
dreams of what they will become as men
As they climb, build & perhaps fight a little
under the warm & comforting boughs of their
crudely built tree house
And as well for my daughters who will delight under
the bright red, yellow & golden curtains
of their favorite cherry blossom as they weave
garlands of flowers & talk their secret codes
in whispered giggles of what fine sweethearts, wives
and adventurers they will become....
Lest that we forget...of those moments
when we shared in rapture under it's
protective green silken curtains,
concealing the magic of a first kiss...
from an unforgettable love...or how we wrap our
arms around it & cry out bitter tears in regret
for the passing of that same love...
Love, Hope & Dreams....
Both young & old one day will sleep under Earth's
warm blanket & dream endlessly about the stars & what had been
& what had not...
The joys, sorrows both happiness & pain
only one comforting arm lulls us to sleep
Knowing when we wake... there will be the promise of a new day...
For my future children & those coming after us,
I must Hope that they too will have what we
have taken for granted & now do not admit we help
destroy...
And because I must Hope,
I pray not to weep...
Author notes
pls rate my poem
Written May 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- New members contest - May 2006 by AP Greeters.
300 points, ended June 5, 2006, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I have to say that I'm with John. You have a wonderful talent, and your freeverse is excellent. Great job, and good luck. Hugs, Patricia
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This was a very provocative read to say the least. I find it so amazing at how our new members can write so many wondrous things. You have done a marvelous job with this.
~ John
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You still have not deleted your other entry. Ok.. a long write but well thought and written. Yes, as others have said read teh rules again, your poem needs to fit in the length specified as well. Good luck in the contest
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This was an enjoyable poem to read, but I must agree with Stacy's comments - the ellipses are a bit too much for the poem, and there are some rules you missed out (length of piece and the option number in your author comments)
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PS: The length of this piece also went over the limit, so that's something else that requires your attention to remain eligible for judging.
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This was a thought-provoking write, highlighting the benefits and purpose of nature and reminding us to preserve her for generations to come.
However, I would like to point out that I think there was a slight overusage of ellipses (...) and also that you didn't put which option you chose in your author's comment box. You have lots of time to do so before the contest closes.
Thanks for your entry, and welcome to the site!
Best wishes in the contest.
Stacy
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whoopsie
I see you have posted this poem two times 
if you want to get rid of the duplicate (don't have to if you don't want to though) then you can always click the edit button you see on top of this page, then delete and poof should be gone
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Again, this is beautiful. Being that you have it posted twice in the contest you will need to delete or remove one. If you need any help with that just let me know
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I too commented on the more current one But good luck in the contest and welcome to the site again
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Oops. Looks like you posted this twice. I commented on the more current one. You can easily delete this one without withdrawing the actual poem from the contest. Just thought you'd want to know that.
Edited on May 02, 4:02 p.m. because ''.
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