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What is this?

Locked in this passion
Our hearts intertwined
Seeing none but you
Our love lasts through all
Stormy seas,
Raging winds,
Rabid fire
And after all of this
I still love you
What is my sense of love?
In my heart
I don't believe
I know the real meaning of love
But if this is it
I love it, love you
Passion rushing
Through my soul
Through my heart
Through my veins
This is it; it has to be
But it can't
I'm too young
Too naive
Is this lust?
Infatuation?
Obsession?
No matter what it is
I like it
And I never want to give it up

Author notes

This wasn't a well thought-out piece, I know that, it was a spur of the moment thing, I just wrote down words to get them out and express myself. But I like what came out, probably one of my better 'expression' poems.
Written May 2nd, 2006

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  • Kristen Corpse
    February 5, 2007
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    You did a nice job. You know, seriously, without trying to sound too lame, but when you find love you know. There's no more questions. Nicely written. The background is smokin' (some pun intended xD) Keep it up dear.

    Love always,
    Kristen ♥


  • Ashley Mosely
    May 28, 2006
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    i think you did a good job on this piece-it flows well and i like the background as well

    ash


  • -no-vacancy
    May 3, 2006
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    I really like this poem. I like the fact that you mentioned being too young. I do think that young love is possible, but you are right in wondering if it is just an infatuation. So yea, awesome write, keep up the good work


  • Cherokee
    May 2, 2006
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    That's a cute poem. It's interesting that you say you don't know what the feeling is but you like it. You think it's love but you are smart enough to know that it may just be an infatuation. That's very cool.


  • --Shelbeh--
    May 2, 2006
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    well...wow. i liked this poem especially the beginning, but i think the last 2 lines need some work. they show a significant amount of emotion lost compared to the other parts of the poem. but i do agree with your notes, all in all this is one of your better expression poems, so congratulations and keep writing.


  • solarman
    May 2, 2006
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    Wonderful

    I like this. You feel the conflict of emotions and at the same time you can relate to the feelings in the poem. The whole thing is pretty powerful.

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