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Nathan

 


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I didn’t know who Nathan was that day a few months back
I only knew that he was sick, all huddled in that shack
that sat beside a dirt and gravel road outside of town
old cars were up on blocks, the shack at risk for falling down

 

A giant tree stood regally, stretched out above the yard
No grass would grow, not even weeds, the dirt was cracked and hard
and over by the stand of trees that rimmed his plot of land
sat two recliners, side by side, abandoned in the sand

 

Then once inside the door I saw a bed against the wall
and Nathan lay so quiet there, his frame was frail and small
He strained to rise and looked at me and I could see a spark
His eyes intense and focused, like two beacons in the dark

 

I must confess I didn’t spend too long with him that day
just long enough to do my job and then be on my way
But something bothered me about the man inside the shack
I wondered how he was before his health had gone off track

 

And then I met the family, his mom and many others
a sister and some cousins too, along with his two brothers
Anita was the driving force, his brother Clifton’s wife
My whole view changed, I realized he’d had a love-filled life

 

I watched in awe as all these loving people took his hand
and led him to a safer place away from rust and sand
They knew he didn’t have too long, they’d make the best of it
His diagnosis terminal, they’d take what time they’d get.

 

With boundless love, their outstretched arms held Nathan 'til the end
So grateful for the smallest kindness, making many friends
As fearless as they were, they always focused on the good
Their honesty and gentle spirit blessed me where I stood.

 

We make assumptions, form opinions, based on what we see
but first impressions can be wrong – at least they were for me
We share a warm affection now, with all that we’ve been through
and though I don’t have much to give, these words I give to you.

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Author notes

This is for the family of a patient of mine that died early yesterday morning. He was only 46 years old, and so very sick. His family is just wonderful and I will never forget them.
Written May 2nd, 2006

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  • Topnotchsy
    January 3
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    This is a really touching write, done beautifully!! Thanks for sharing.


  • Tbob
    October 28, 2008
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    omg this is really good and has great rhyming.. luv the poem.


  • apples fell
    May 23, 2008

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    Rhyming poetry has never been my forte, to read or otherwise. But I know enough to be able to appreciate good and descriptive writing and this indeed is. I am terribly sorry that this has such an incredibly sad background though. It's hard to lose someone whom you have a connection with, even if it feels like that person is in your life at only key moments. A person can wait forever for the kind of bond you write about here in your poem and I admire the incredible amount of intensity that went into putting this together. Of course I could point out where things could be shortened, etc, but this poem really would suffer from any edits. It could easily ruin the extreme beauty that you have captured. This brings me back to poems I've read from you in the past and you are one of those rare writers that can captivate me beyond my usually critical eye fro rhyming poetry. Becky the years are long but each experience and each love we carry with us will eventually pay off. It has to. I will not admit this life is for nothing. I just won't.
    Touching and admirable work.

    ;


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 30, 2008

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    This really touches me Becky. I really admire you. I don't think I would be able to do your line of work, being around so many that are dying. You've really outdid yourself penning this. It is beautifully done.

  • Comme Les Autres
    September 14, 2007

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    This is a work of art crafted into wonder by pain... I hope that you keep to what you said and remember their family... I hope that they have found blessing and peace....

     

    Zach *rose*

  • Gayline
    July 26, 2007

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    Well done

    Makes me cry but I know from personal experience the joy that kind words can bring when you lose a loved one. Life can be hard some times. The poem is beautifully consructed. Well written


  • catz Moderators member
    April 22, 2007

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    This such a wonderous poem, Becky. I know that all too often we assume the wrong things about people before we know the true circumsances. Nathan is so fortunate to have had the loving family he was blessed with, and they too were blessed with him.

    And you were blessed for having them come into your life.

    Your poem is so touching. What a strong and wonderful message it carries.

    luv and
    Dee


  • PureAmethyst
    April 21, 2007

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    I can relate perfectly to this. People assume because I live alone at the age of 16 and I was homeless that I have a very rough background, but I really don't, I have wonderful parents, and a gorgeous younger sister. My family have always looked out for me. It all depends on the circumstance you've been put in. Some people may have no choice. A wonderful write. I used to accuse the nurses who looked after me of not really caring, that they were just doing their job. But I realise that they really did, beautiful write, well done. I'm sorry about the soul that past away.


    xXxPurexXx



  • I will stand by you
    January 23, 2007
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    such a good poem even if it is sad.


  • WinE-reDpuddles
    December 24, 2006

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    oh..... beautiful

    ive had wrong first impressions too. u truly have talent.. and u use it wisely. its a luvly poem. merry christmas and happy new yr. i look forward to readin more


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 3, 2006
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    what people don't see often isn't what is happening.
    I've first hand seen what certain diseases can do within one's life.
    It's good that someone can see and care when others need it!
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill

  • Tercil gold member
    November 19, 2006

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    This was a very well written devotional to assume this Nathan had really brought you back home to write was seemingly ages at wroking wondering what kind of send of you'd send, Really heart wrenching!!!


  • Emerald Jewel
    November 5, 2006
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    wow. such profound words.

  • Tercil gold member
    October 26, 2006
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    One of the best stories I've read in a long time, and I suppose those comments above can only diminish mine, so I have to wow to theirs and gosh to yours, Lovely work..


  • myrataal gold member
    October 23, 2006
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    Becky I came here because I miss you. Your words are so meaningful and always written in the flow of a true narrator and compassionate healer. How are you? Please let me know.

    Love

    Myra


  • Von Powell gold member
    October 16, 2006
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    I'd like to give you more Becky but this has hit home so hard. Working in the caring profession - we run the gammut of emotions but to see a man die surrounded by the love of a family who never gave up on him is awe inspiring.
    A definite Kleenex poem
    Beautifully written.
    Von


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    October 9, 2006
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    I just loved this, this act of kindness, and I dont know, what to say. thanks for sharing this Becky.

    Love and light,
    Lencio

  • Kari gold member
    August 25, 2006
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    Awesome!

    awwww...I am very sorry for your loss I am sure that was hard. This was incredible...I hope u share this with more then just ppl on here!

    Kari


  • LeeStone
    May 26, 2006
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    It's so easy to make those snap judgements based on appearance. Glad you saw beneath the surface to the beautiful person underneath. As always, this was very well written.

    ~ Lee A. Stone


  • Touchof1der silver member
    May 8, 2006
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    It's funny how things draw us away from the things and the people we love and even though we never forget them, the draw to "do our own thing" can be overpowering sometimes. It doesn't always make sense to those around us and it may not always be what is best for us at the but God bless family, friends and people like you who care beyond measure regardless of the cost. Love ya lady!
    ♥ Touchof1der


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    May 6, 2006
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    It took me a while to get back to this Becky but I love it even more now than the first time I read it. It's amazing isn't it, that the world is full of people and, when chance and circumstances direct us into each other's path, and we take the time to look and listen and be a part, we really meet those people and they become a part of us and we a part of them, if even so briefly as this. And yet, we never know what affect we will have on each other's future - and that's the wonderful part. Bless you for the work you do, for all the Nathans you encounter and give your love and attention and skills. It's a wonderful girl and I love you for it.

    Paul


  • symitar Moderators member
    May 2, 2006
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    I do appreciate what you are saying in your comment, looking for me - and let me explain a bit about that. Nathan was 46 years old and had made some bad choices in his life. He had chosen to live in a certain way (the shack was a part of that) and he really didn't want anyone taking charge of his life. When he got to a point in his illness that he needed help, he finally agreed to let his family help him. Once he made that decision, they stepped up to the plate. They were the most loving and nurturing group I've seen in a long time. They had respected his decision to be independent, but there was never a time that he wasn't in touch with his family. He loved his mother dearly, and the closeness they had toward the end was inspirational to watch.

    I could have written pages on this man, but I tried to keep it shorter as the chaplain was going to read it at his service. There were many layers and so many twists and turns in the life of this man, but his last couple of months were a comfort to him and he died surrounded by loving family.

    What more could we want?

    Thank you once again for your question - I hope my answer makes sense, its been a long week.

    sym


  • hugh wyles silver member
    May 2, 2006
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    Dear Becky,
    My first step, after reading this was to bookmark it, not only as a well-written and clearly expressive poem with well-crafted rhyme and meter, but as a moving and worthwhile human statement.
    Secondly I want to thank you here for the comforting message of sympathy which you sent when my sister died of the same awful, wasting, disease.
    For both reasons your poem touches me very deeply indeed and I feel for your own sorrow over Nathan's death as I did for the sadness of the nurses who had cared for Joy in her last weeks.
    Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.


  • May 2, 2006
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    Truly a beautiful and heart pulling piece... I sort of agree with 'looking for me'... It all seems so sad that they could not take him away sooner - to be with them, to get the care he needed, etc.
    This is a very well written and expressed piece, one that I will not soon forget!


  • peru
    May 2, 2006
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    This is a great piece and is very discriptive. It is filled with true emotions and that is what makes this worth reading and worth appreciating. I loved the flow of words and though it was not too poetic, I still loved the rhyme.
    Blessed are those who get love from the people they love and blessed are those who believe in loving and spreading happiness.
    This poem is a great inspiration to those who want to know and understand what love is actually what unconditional love is!
    All the best for future and keep those thoughts flowing so wonderfully. And remember if you get into any trouble and don't understand what the way out is just relax, pray, think and have faith and believe me your troubles will run away in no time!
    Take good care of yourself and MAY GOD ALWAYS BLESS YOU!

    --peru.

  • Mystery Dragon
    May 2, 2006
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    I do not know if this poem is real but what bothers me. Where was his family when he was living in the shack. That time was lost. Did he have someone who really cared? Yes, it is great they took he back but at what cost? Did we think of that?


  • Cherokee
    May 2, 2006
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    I loved this poem except for the "So grateful (greatful) for the smallest kindness,making many friends" part. That was the only part that didn't seem to fit this beautiful poem, in my opinion. What about something like: "He seemed so very greatful for each gesture they would send" or "He seemed so very thankful for each gesture they would lend". or something like that. I don't know. It's such a beautiful poem. I understood it because I am an RN and I have learned what you have learned. It is a great message and written so beautifully.

  • quite emo actually
    May 2, 2006
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    Definitely a topic I think we can all relate to. at least, I could. Brings me to tears. Beautiful poem.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 2, 2006
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    well done

    wonderfully done my friend. I am a CNA and know how it appears when you see some of these poeple, first impressions, and also been slapped with reality of how good their families are to them You caught this in a good light. Did well with the rhyme and getting t he point across, thanks for sharing.
    God bless
    Victoria


  • Catressa
    May 2, 2006
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    Sweet Becky,

    I have come to learn that you are right,some things are never what they appear at first. You for example, have shown me, kindness when others would scorn.(long time ago)And yet now I admire you, for who you are and what I see here. Your heart. I am sure you shed many tears in private, then dried your eyes and said I will show him I remember and I felt the love in their presence. Copy this for them. Even if it takes you months to take it to them.. They would love to know they mattered to you.

    Thank you for allowing me to view into your window..

    Be safe Lovely,
    Cat

  • wickedpsycho
    May 2, 2006
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    Amazing

    This was such an emotional poem that I'm at a loss for words. Though I'm not crying (yet) I want to. I read the poem way too fast to realize it was not another dumb thoughtless one. When I went back and read it slowly, it brought tears to my eyes. A friend of mine lost his mother to cancer recently and the pain is still fresh on my mind. Beautiful work, beautiful poem. Just plain beautiful. I hope his family reads this poem.


  • i love poohbear
    May 2, 2006
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    awwww..this is sooo sad & sweet
    sorry to hear about nathan


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 2, 2006
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    Heart felt write, and we feel the compasion that the family had for this man during his last days on earth. Great rhythm and rhyme, sentiments well expressed in these lines, easy to read and understand.


  • RMBramwell
    May 2, 2006
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    Image-Creating Perfection!

    The rhyming was perfect! You created so many images in my mind, with the words you chose. I love it when people do that. Keep up the good work!


  • Hoosierpoet silver member
    May 2, 2006
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    One of the best poems I have read in a good while. You put this together beautifully. Very touching.

    Best wishes,
    Hoosierpoet


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 2, 2006
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    This piece is so wonderfully done with truly excellent rhytem and flow. I loved the imagry and the emotion as well as the message that you were able to so easily convey thru this piece. excellent job from start to finish. Bunny

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    May 2, 2006
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    What a great poem to share with us. And yes more people ought to get to know people before they go judging or assuming. Great work.


  • real irish rose
    May 2, 2006
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    I worked in an old peoples home and befriended a man called John and he had a problem which I won't go into here but anyways he had been thrown away like a piece of junk and I befriended him and from what I could understand he had a magnificent life he was in the Navy and travelled the world, he had a beautiful wife who passed away in her early forties and he passed away aged 82 years old and on his final day alive he told me he would be meeting Mary tonight and I never really paid much attention but that night he passed away and joined his true and only love Mary and this poem reminds me of him I will never forget him he was a fantastic man and I had grown really fond of him.....Thankyou for writing this and letting me remember all the memories we shared.
    Well written and because I can feel the love in this piece I applaud you hun xx


  • dericlee
    May 2, 2006
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    Well, I usually DO like rhyming poems...and the skill needed to maintain the near immaculate meter here while holding to completely natural speech patterns in almost every quatrain is very impressive.

    (Quick aside...in your penultimate quatrain, line one, the word "till" is meant to be a contraction from "until", right? It should be written as 'til, not till.)

    I'm sure Ann, Renee and Coral are correct about the emotive content as well, though I haven't been letting things touch me lately (I'm a little raw, but you know that).

    Bex, this is one of the best I've seen lately. It may well be one of your best ever. Makes me wish I wish I could applaud the same poem twice.


  • Coral
    May 2, 2006
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    Omg...I loved this. I usually don't like rhyming poems but this was just beautiful. When I saw it I thought it would be a drag to read, but it read beautifully.


  • AnnD Moderators member
    May 2, 2006
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    Becky,
    This is beautiful. Once again your heart and compassion pours out onto the page in telling of Nathans story.
    They are blessed to have you at their side along with their families at such times.



    Ann


  • poetryality silver member
    May 2, 2006
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    I am in tears. This is absolutely beautiful. I know everyone will appreciate the sincerity of these words. I am missing Patric and although this makes me even more mournful. It is exceedingly eloquent, and the rhythm is lyrical. Beautiful!

    Renee

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