johnsons' store in days of yore
was a magical place for me
it's where we'd go to have a chat
and a pot of nice hot tea
we'd talk of last nights picture
and this weeks hit parade
then home for bread and dripping
we thought we had it made
a time of simple pleasures
good friends and ration books
before the world became obsessed
with money and good looks
if i gaze inside my minds eye
i can see it to this day
the street i loved and lived in
...will never fade away.
floorboards.
Author notes
option 2 the emotion here is love and a yearning for better times
if this isn't ok just remove it i'm not changing my comments again.
Written May 1st, 2006
A contest entry
- RHYME TIME by piccola.
450 points, ended March 20, 2007, 26 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling all Poets for Poetry #2 (minamal pre-writes allowed) by Dark Whispers.
315 points, ended March 29, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Memories by Shining for You.
1050 points, ended April 27, 2007, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Oh, how I can identify!
Wonderful words! I can remember some of those times, too. I loved the first verse where, in my mind, I was taken back to "Gay-Nells" where we would gather after school, have a coke, and read the newest movie magazines. Good luck in the contest.
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This has very reminiscent quality mixed with excellent poetic rhyme and flow, I really enjoyed this one!
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Good job
Very good job and best fo luck in the contest I loved this!! A very warm poem, one we can all relate to in some way. -
Better days is just what everyone needs. This was a great poem. Good job and good luck in the contest and We pry for better times.~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~`~~~~
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I'm in love with better days passed. I don't think about the past as much as I'd like to because I'm too busy trying to make tomorrow wonderful (which doesn't usually work out), but I do love remembering. It often breaks my heart, but I love it all the same, partly because it's how we become who we are. So thanks for all that. Very nice job and good luck in the contest.
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I love the author notes LOL. As to the poem, it's filled with nostalgia and I really like it. It made me feel warm and fuzzy..plus the rhyme was great. thanks for the great entry.
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Not everything that needs to be in your author's comments is there... feel free to fix it and re-enter!
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thank you very much,
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A very sweet and nostalgic write. Just what I asked for. Thanks for entering.
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Love this happy poem. I relate, I remember well the pan drippings on bread as a special treat. Bugger the cholesterol.
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thank you very much,
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thanks again shutterbox,
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magnificent piece and a pleasure to read. MY favorite line was the one about tea.
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heehee,thanks,dripping is animal fat i think,you can get beef dripping it's like butter but meaty,thanks for your comments,
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This is a very nice poem. However, I'm curious about "dripping"? What is it? Gravy? I'm not up on British slang words, I guess. Anyway, nice job.
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Very Good!
Total Score:8.5+8.6=17.1
Average Score:8.55
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Brilliant!
Score:8.6
Brilliant job with the poems.They really convey a strong and nice message.This one rhymed and flowed very well and was well written.Best of luck in the contest
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hey, congrats again
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thank you very much!,
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WHOA. This is... so simple... makes me remember those simple days....shows the best in such the littest things....the world is just after money and looks and whatnot...but I stay back in the casual past....I love tea on a sunday afternoon and reading books in the sunlight....the such....beautiful....a definite YES in this contest! LOVED it! Thanks for entering && good luck!
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Mr. board.. that's the second time Alex... cool name though , hehe.
Nostalgic write... we had ration books here even when I was about 10... but not tht many old memories for me.. come on! I'm not tht old yet!
But you're fantastic with words
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thanks again,i must read some of your stuff soon.
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hahaha!!!mr board,hehe.x
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haha!thanks rebeka,for corned beef?!
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a wonderful write, and congrats on the win! this made me hungry, lol! enjoyed reading this one.
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congrats, Mr. Board.
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thanks a lot grannyeri,much appreciated.
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thank you very much!
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Great write - can visualize the place and see the people chatting. Congratulations on winning gold in this short contest.
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Wow this is truly fabulous - no wonder you won gold. Just brilliant!.. x
LB
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Very well done floorboards, a lovely picture of the past you created there. Good luck in the contest. Val.
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Well written
Awesome poem and great picture to go with it. I'll have to read some more of your work. Here we go... "View next by author!" -
Very sweet reminiscence, even if on a place that probably doesn't exist (as I imagine it's a musing on the picture presented with the piece)
Very well done.
Take care
Nick -
thanks very much!very much appreciated.
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Very nicely done! I enjoyed the rhythm of this poem. The flow and the imagery were very nicely executed. Good luck in the contest.
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thanks kenny,very much appreciated.
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excellent
Awe yeah,i really really loved this poem,it's written so well,and it put a smile on my face thinking back to the old shops i used to go to as a young boy.Great job my friend.Kenny -
halcyon just means a time of peace and happiness,yes i am too young to remember ration books,and you're right,if you do beat me with a stick,i will love it.c'mon and give us your best shot.x
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I can never remember what halcyon is but it feels like this color of yellow to me, actually. I love that you mention ration books but you're too young for those, aren't you? Anyway, I'll beat you with a stick and you'll love it, I promise! LOL.
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