If Egypt should pronounce me dead,
Then let me walk amongst the tombs.
Wrap bandages from foot to head,
And let me play with putrid fumes.
If Casanova be fond of me,
Let us live tales of sultry bliss.
Trembling with a lover’s plea,
Over each spontaneous kiss.
If Spring should birth the devil’s spawn,
Then let the world be seen as fire.
Rising hope of the Lord at dawn,
In the hum of modern choir.
If Poetry should make me dumb,
Let me stew in my emotion.
And if vision of life seems numb,
I will sleep on that mere notion.
Author notes
Not sure where this came from. Hope it's reasonably clear why I titled this piece the way I did. Thanks for reading, please comment.
Written May 1st, 2006
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That was great!! I felt like I traveled to a distant land. RobinRae.
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very nice write and you did so well with the flow thanks for sharing this piece keep up the awesome poetry best of luck in this contest here.
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This is almost a perfect poem hon.. I agree with Sin Heart Tom my only suggestion would be to take out the "and" in your first stanza last line.. the images you painted take you to faraway dreamy places in my mind..
Take care hon, Rowan Tree
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i LOVE well formatted poems that make SENSE. i hate jarbled things. i love the metaphors that you used thorughout the peice it gave it a nice *oomph haha. my favorite stanza was the last one
"If Poetry should make me dumb,
Let me stew in my emotion.
And if vision of life seems numb,
I will sleep on that mere notion."
the last line gave me a good smile seeming as how the poem is titled "insomnia?" the line "and if vision of life seems numb" has a quiet strength about it. it's a good ending. kept my attention from the first to the last line!
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I really loved this! The whole idea behind the poem itself is really interesting and it kept me attentive the whole way through. Great rhyming and nicely used metaphors. Great work!!
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Wow. Amazing. Very good poem, great idea,good use of words. I like it!
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Great Poem!
Good choice of words you put in this.Very well done,the rhyming was good and the poem was even better.I really liked it.Keep up the good work! -
Beautiful. The poem flows well, and the stanzas are just fantastic. I loved the meaning behind the poem, and especially the firstandlast stanza. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us all, poet.Keep the ink flowing, for your talent shows so clearly.
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