I'm so scared now
And you think you've won
Maybe you have
Panic rises in my throat
At the thought of having to talk to you
When I left
I thought the battle was over
I should have known
The war would go on
Because you will never let me go.
Author notes
Not one of my better pieces. In fact, it sucks. But it's a piece. More than I've written in months. Depression is Hell.
Written May 1st, 2006
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It wasn't that bad, you just didn't extend much on the poem. Don't be afraid to change it a bit if you feel like it. The first line and the last line tie the poem together very well. The middle is a bit hasty but has good expression of emotions. Maybe work on it. I've done that with many of my writings. "If you don't go back and change anything nothing will get better." -My teacher once told me
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Bravo!
A very dark, even disturbing piece! Deftly done! Bravo! -
Precision, poignant, to the point. This battle at you have won. Situations like this are simply disturbing. But if you can release some emotion or idea, then youhave taken something negative and proven that you can use that as a positive.
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The battles are never over... they just get smaller and smaller. I hope you are free of the war! Some of us never are, we just keep finding new ones.
This doesn't suck, it is a perfect expression of feeling. Glad to see you back also.
jill
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I also suffer depression and PTSD so this piece I can relate to totally so I don't think it sucks in any shape or form !!!
Well written and a pleasure to read xx -
'Depression is hell.' I could not agree with you more. I write a lot of pieces like this when I am depressed. I like how you kept it short and simple. It may not be one of your better pieces, but it does not suck.
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Bravo
Good job, keep it up, Bravo -
Strong in impact~so there! Write some more for us! Cheers Kaz.
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It truly does not suck. It holds alot of depth and feeling actually. I like it and I can relate to it from my past. Ty for sharing it and I hope the words find your fingertips forevermore. Brave on....
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This dosent suck it is a very powerful poem that shows the reader your pain and strife to go on and in that I say you did a brilliant job..
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well done
Pain and sadness, I am so sorry your going through this. I hope all works out for you.
God Bless
Victoria -
I'm sorry that you are going through such a terrible time. I hope that everything works out for you. Take care and keep writing!
Allen0826
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